get down to pray
not sure what to say
tired of living this way
not everything is okay
conflicting inmy head
i lay down in bed
think about the good instead
having a hard time
so bad is my mind
why cant everybody just leave me alone
so much easier on my own
need to just be the way i see
i know my life today
is not going to be just okay
didnt know it will be this damn hard
cant they tell
i am living in my own hell
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Written August 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- please understand me now by forced perfection.
450 points, ended May 6, 2007, 17 entries
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hey
Sorry I judged this contest so late. I had a million and one things to do.
Your poem is a lot like a million poems I wrote. It is teenage thinking. Just like a lot of the other poems that entered this contest.
I might not be the right person to really judge this poem for what it says, for I am not religious and I find it hard to identify with even the slightest religious thought in poems. I can judge it on originality, and this poem wasn’t exactly original, I can also judge it on a nice flow, and I think having more than 2 lines riming with each other
get down to pray
not sure what to say
tired of living this way
not everything is okay
doesn’t really work.
Thank you for entering this contest, I hope you didn’t take this personally. You put great effort in this, I just think you could do better.
Love & peace
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I reall enjoyed reading this it has this kind of focus on it that just leads you to feel just as you felt
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