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White Noise

Head Pounding, Heart Beating
Could Be Worse

Heart Pounding, Limbs Aching
Didn't See This Coming

Limbs Aching, Breathing Hard
Beginning to Wonder What's Wrong

Mind Blanking, Eyes Glazing
Dear God This Is Horribly Amazing

White Noise, Faded Pictures
I Forgot Why This Matters

Eyes Close, Head Back
All I See Is Black

Eyes Open, Heart Clenches
My Vision's Blurred

Hot Tears, Blank Face
Ah Well This Is What It's Like To Be In Pain

Labored Breathing, Sharp Gasp
I Can't Remember Who I Was

Choked Whimpers, Strong Sting
My World is Shattering

White Noise, Fade Pictures
My Mind Has Emptied, My Eyes Are Glazed, Tears Are Falling,
My Heart Is Hurting, My Soul Is Crying, My Throat Is Clenching Strangling Agonized Cries,
It Hurts So Much I Almost Forget.

Almost

White Noise
The World Goes Black

But You Still Remain.

Author notes

Its something i wrote when one of my best friends moved....He was there for me when ever i needed him.He was like a brother to me...Hope you like it and please tell me what you really think about it!!!
Written August 19th, 2006

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  • light cloud
    August 27, 2006
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    this very good


  • August 21, 2006
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    I really think that it's really really good! Lots of emotion in this piece!