Velvet covered hardened steel--
your soft sweet heart do not reveal.
You take the stage, rip, snarl, and moan.
Then afterwards, drained and alone,
you go back to your hotel room,
and let some groupie dust your broom,
or desperately search the Internet
to find a girl you can't forget.
So many there cause such a crush.
But none of them can match the rush...
your real lover is the stage.
You are a living "Turn The Page".
Perhaps some day you'll find the girl
who's more than just a "Tilt-A-Whirl".
And for now, the many faithful fans
will hold your heart in loving hands.
"It's all about the music."
Author notes
Written August 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- Song/Lyric Writer's Contest by Acronym.
850 points, ended March 9, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Nice poem. I really like it. I like the way you wrote it. great work. keep it up! You should have gotten at least a bronze medal for this! or at least an HM! my gosh. haha. great write, again. keep it up!
Crimson -
WOW
Good luck in the contest.
You did an excellent job capturing the behind the scenes life of a performer. Nice Job on this!
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oh yeah
I may not be a star but I am a musician, so I know what's it's like to feel like you're absolutely drained every second your off stage after a show.
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Being a rock stsar can have its ups, but there are downs as well. Am sure this stardom can go to one's head but there will be a crash one day and the it's all back to normal. Liked the flow, the rhythm and rhyme and the thoughts shared in these lines.
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wow
That's awesome. the flow was amazing, and i loved the rhyming, it wasn't forced and it fit so spectacularly with the whole idea of the poem. the ending was great.
You take the stage, rip, snarl, and moan.
Then afterwards, drained and alone,
have to be my favorite lines. If i was a star, this would be me... the whole poem, i can relate (but I'm only a theatregeek)
good write, please keep it up
~Soten Shinku-Ha Jaganshi
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You'd think being a rockstar would be living everyone's dream. I wouldn't mind it, but I guess not everything is as good as it sounds. The poem was great though.
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Good poem
I like the flow and the sentiments of your poem. I also like the words you use, and the fact that not all of us are destined to find true love.
Thanks
Perdix
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great write!
I've been a faithful fan but never thought of my heros in this light - although I can imagine it is very true now I think of it. Loved the flow and the rhyme, but must of all love the ending.
I guess at the end of the day what makes us look up and adore these people is the simple fact that what they do IS really 'all for the music'. Shame that what makes these people so great to us can make these people feel so lonley.
Thought provoking write - I really enjoyed it
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You take the stage, rip, snarl, and moan.
first off, love the topic. great write! -
you go back to your hotel room,
or let some groupie dust your broom,
or desperately search the Internet
to find a girl you can't forget...
I do understand the truth of this life and its representation of dreams as well..you have described here a life which is very thought provoking and contains a meaning of its own kind too...So very true and so very deep as well..It is life and it is one way traffic... you can allow to enter in this life into your structure ...and when you can not go with it and there you are missing it..and this sense of missing is a continuous search which is always beyond to our own controls ..here you are very beautifully expressing this great truth indeed...Thanks you so much for sharing this to us..
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