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the missing wind


Tired of  bloodshed and battle
Rape and riot, killing and carnage
The missing wind rattle
‘I am in search of peace’-or to hide

Crushed by womanliness
Chased by flowers for stolen fragrance
Kissed by waves for tickling
Coercing the clouds, uprooting
                                the enormous sky
Gathering dreams, borrowing sorrows
Shaping hopes, hoping to shape
Reaping ripples, reveling in melodies
Hidden by sobs, hugged by laughter
Weighing bonds, winnowing ignorance
Heavy with despair, heaving confusion
Reflecting sweet nothings, revealing
                                                bitter atrocities
Reaching to future, trying to nurture
Disguised.......
Silver air, golden air, green air, dark air, blue air
On the mountain breast, in the meadow’s mind
Below the ravine’s  murmur, beneath
                                      the anklet of streams
On the chirping landscape, over the flapping
                                                Cascade
Above the mysterious cliff, amidst mystic twilight
Running, running, running.......
To find peace
Like I in search of me!


Author notes

the wind is in search of peace.but where to find in this world of fighting and terrorism.
i chose the word 'running'

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  • Philosopher Gabriel
    August 5, 2008
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    Your word choice is amazing. Thanks for entering, and good luck.


  • crivanea silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    nice personifcation..nice imagery..Coercing the clouds, uprooting
    the enormous sky
    ..two really good lines..nice job w/ this piece and good luck in the contest


  • MrCrepsley
    May 19, 2008

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    lush!!!!!!!!!!



    I loved the way you personified the wind.
    Good luck in the contest


  • Melissa Burns
    April 30, 2008

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    I enjoyed these lines from the poem
    Coercing the clouds, uprooting
    the enormous sky
    Gathering dreams, borrowing sorrows
    Shaping hopes, hoping to shape

    Very unusual feel to this poem, I enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for your wonderful entry into my ever so humble little contest. The best of luck to you in all it's ventures!


  • LadyUnique silver member
    March 5, 2008

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    there's something about this i like. like a magnet i keep going back to read it
    'like I in search of me' is my favorite line. makes me think that if we just stand still, long enough, we might find ourselves.
    thanks for entering and best of luck


  • ibsons hysops
    June 1, 2007
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    awsomed! you are a finalist!


  • WindUpEnigma gold member
    May 31, 2007

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    This is a powerful piece, full of vivid images and strong chords. What a unique way to look at wind!
    Line 3: "missing wind rattle"--it seems that the subject and verb don't agree, though maybe I'm reading it wrong. If I'm not, it should be either "winds rattle" or "wind rattles."
    Line 5: I'm not sure what you mean by "crushed by womanliness."
    All of the descriptions are beautiful, compelling.
    "Below the ravine's murmur, beneath the anklet of streams"--love that one especially.
    The ending is absolutely perfec.
    All in all, this work packs quite a punch, digging deep and captivating the mind as well as the heart.
    Best of luck in the contest.


  • Laura
    March 2, 2007

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    Above the mysterious cliff, amidst mystic twilight
    Running, running, running.......
    To find peace
    Like I in search of me!
    what a powerful way to end..this is truely moving well done and good luck in my contest
    laura xx


  • naked roots
    January 19, 2007
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    "Below the ravine’s murmur, beneath
    the anklet of streams"
    Loved those lines. You had several sections of wording that stuck in my mind. Great work and thank you very much for entering my contest.

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