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Come Within Dreams

(verse1)
they say that dreams can come true
they say that dreams are worth having
but they never did say that
dreams can bring you sorrow too

i feel this sudden rush of pain
when i see you standing there just
being the pretty little thing that you are
and you're talking to them

(bridge1)
whenever you are leaving
i can feel you out of reach
i can feel my whole world crumbling down
and it's so hard to breathe

i can never get to you
'cause you're standing so far away
but when you're near it hurts so much that i
don't know what to say

(break)
when dreams come
when its dark
i lose my way
baby just for that while

when dreams come
when i smile
i lay so still
i can almost hear you sigh

(chorus)
you are there within
you are there with me
it's nothing i want more
it's nothing i can keep

i see your eyes on me
i see you reach for me
our touch is not meant to be
when you come within my dreams

(verse2)
all i can do is look from afar
when you laugh when you frown
when you tuck your hair behind your ear
how beautiful is that?

i can never bring myself to you
i can never find the courage
to take that extra step forward
and to find myself standing next to you

(bridge2)
i don't think i stand a chance
i don't think i can make you mine
when they can give you so much more
I'll be the last one down the line

but when you look at me
you're eyes mesmerizing me
I'm awake i see my dreams unfold
it's a whole new world

(break)
(chorus)

(bridge3)
i can wake up beside you
i can hold you in my arms
i can taste the smell of your hair and
together we'll greet the sun

nothing yet everything
so near yet so far
it's never what it may seem
when you come within my dreams

(break)
(chorus)

(outro)
i see you in my sleep
you come within my dreams
you haunt me in the dark
oh can't you hear me scream?
you come within my dreams
oh that's when you'll come
you only come within my dreams

Author notes

Option 1. a very simple love song with simple lyrics, albeit a little long but it really isnt when i sing it lol.
Written August 18th, 2006

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  • Delrondu
    August 22, 2006
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    thanks. you're right. some songs, when you read it, it doesnt flow at all. i dont prefer one better than the other, but it's just the way they are. lately i've been listening to a lot of Jewel Kilcher. if you know her, you'll know the kind of song-structure she writes. not that i'm saying that's how mine is. but its just the way they are. thanks for the contest.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 20, 2006
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    This is really good! Ya see, when I write lyrics (which is all I write anymore) when I sing it, it doesn't sound that bad. But then when I read it, it sounds a little off. But that's quite allright because not all songs have the same beat and flow and what not. This was just fine. I really enjoyed reading this song. Thanks for sharing this and for entering. Good luck in my contest and with everything else!