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You are on my mind today.

You are on my mind today.
I'd like to call, what would I say?

I got a message from you.
I am confused as what to do...

I want to call and say hi.
About this, I will not lie.

I am not free to act on this.
Reasons why, on a long list...

I like the way you write,
Puts the world in a different light.

I'd like to call and say hello,
but my conscience is saying no...


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Written August 18th, 2006

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  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 16, 2006
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    this was a very good write . keep up the good work and say i have a book comeing out soon if you are interested i will im you when it gets out on the market

  • TheScottishIrishman
    August 19, 2006
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    Not to bad of a poem but it felt like you wrote it to make it rhyme not because its what you had to say. I think you should write what you have to say not write what'll make a decent rhyme.


  • NickyC1988
    August 18, 2006
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    This is very good. Clearing the mind and fixing the old, then moving on to the new. Too much at once causes the confusion in your mind. Take it one step at a time. Hope you find the answers you need .

  • hose30
    August 18, 2006
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    I feel you on this.It had a lot of emotion.When you love someone they will be on your mind today and everyday.Good write.Can you give me feedback on my poem.Silence.