Numbed to all the pain I felt,
my life’s blood has run away,
my breath has slowed and stopped,
I have nothing left to say,
I beg you breathe upon me,
to give me a life again,
touch my frozen sensless skin,
so I can feel love and pain,
I beg you to touch my heart,
I need to know it’s not steel,
I beg you breathe upon me,
I only want to be real.
DancingRed. 180806
Author notes
I was inspired by the song 'Bring Me To Life' - Evanescence. 
For the contest: I am ever so sorry but I haven't been very inspired of sorts lately. I decided to enter a pre-write. This is my attempt at finding an old piece to go with the picture - hope it's good enough!
Option 8 of category Love. I was given this image as inspiration: www.deviantart.com/deviation/33437317/?qo=38&q=forever+love+boost%3Apopular+ag
Written August 18th, 2006
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A contest entry
- PREWRITES! Picture contest! options for Everyone![[ Themes are God, nature, dark, love and humor]] by blood tourniquet.
300 points, ended October 6, 2006, 21 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks for your such a lovely comment. I wish you all the best with the judging.
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This really fits the picture! Great job!! I think it's hard to enter a prewrite that fits with a picture...you did it very well!
The poem was full of bittersweet pain, the kind of pain I love the most
The flow was great and it should be used as lyrics 
You don't have to feel sorry because your inspiration didn't came. I fully understand and this great write makes everything allright
Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessed Be
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Thanks!
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awesome
Short, and to the point. Awesome rhyme and flow. It all went together perfectly. Thanks for entering, and best of luck!
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Thanks!
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awesome indeed!
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Thanks for comment Dreamwriter I had heaps a great time doing your contest!
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Wow very good I like it alot wow thanks so much for entering.
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Yep, when I put my do-not-disturb face on it means I'm writing poetry!
DancingRed.
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Awesome, DancingRed!
Its very like Bring me to life by Evanescence- I heard you playing it this morning and thought you must be writing a poem!
I love how you repeated 'I beg you...' in the poem, especially in the last two lines where it says 'I beg you breathe upon me, I only want to be real.'
I also love where it says 'touch my frozen sensless skin'.
Once again, awesome!
-WildStorm
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