Seashore
A restful place
peaceful breeze; calling birds
gentle waves are touching the shore
the harmonious dance that never ends
two lovers locked in an embrace
kissing and retreating
unending love
Seashore
Author notes
Richtameter form
Written August 18th, 2006
A contest entry
- 100 Short Prewrites by Kari.
450 points, ended March 31, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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WOAH!!!! I adored this!! Very well done here!!
I loved it from beginning to the very end Thanks 
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This rictameter flows as smoothly as the waves upon the seashore. It is very well written, and uses very descriptive meaning, L5 is very nice, “the harmonious dance that never ends .” I love the deeper meaning behind every line.
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Deserved applause! ENCORE!
Very well written and metered! A great example of rictameter! Superb descriptive flow and imagery
Keep writing and good luck in the contest!
Applauds for you!
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Ah, yes, this is a very beautiful poem. I applaud you.
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Ohhh taht was Beautiful... You have done such a lovely job on this well done!! Keep up the great work and keep writing more poetry soon!!
i also really like the picture its really romantic nice work!!! Good luck in the comp hope you win!!! :0 talk too you soon From Princess Paige xoxoxoxoxo 
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This makes want to go kill someone. In other words I am very happy because this is a very good meter a ricky. GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Wow. That was fabulous. Totally my dream place.
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Beautiful, bright, brilliant, full of positive energy, defined, soulful, and a delight to read.
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Hi Spiritual Poet. A lovely write. Beautiful imagery, flow and tone. Lovely descriptives and expression of emotion. Nice alliteration and assonance. Lovely metaphor. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read. Shelley
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'two lovers locked in an embrace
kissing and retreating '
beautiful metaphore for the tide.
good luck!
rachel -
Gorgeous, I love writing about the water in this form as well, it can really become rythmic like the ebb and flow, this is just beautiful!
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I love this rictameter!!! I love rictameters full stop, but this is a lovely descriptive piece!! Perfect syllable count and great symmetry!! I have entered this too (Gushing) and now I'm getting worried
Good luck in the contest!! Sarah Louise Hudson
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Subtle and smooth - this is a beautiful little piece of creation! I love the seashore and I love how you made the kissing and retreating couple into a metaphor. Nature reflects so many of our ways of life, doesn't it? Lovely.
Good luck in the contest.
Melanie
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Lovely.I often walk along the sea shore.A place of peace and harmony where I can rid myself of all negative rhoughts.i love your picture too, Ros
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EXCELLENT
A VERY BEAUTIFUL WORK, WELL THOUGHT OUT, THE WORDS ARE WOVEN JUST PERFECTLY, YOU OBVIOUSLY LOVE NATURE, AND YOUR SPIRIT MUST BE BEAUTIFUL, GOD BLESS, MAY THE GODS OF HEALTH, WEALTH AND HAPPINESS FOLLOW YOU WERE EVER YOU GO -
Thanks you so much for hsaring this. it was wonderfully written and thouroughly enjoying to read. Kep up the good work and I hope to read more from you later.
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Absolutely wonderful! I could almost feel the breeze and see the birds and watch the waves just reading this poem!
Edited on Aug 19, 2:16 p.m. because ''. -
Fabulous!!!!!! I wish I were out at the seashore right now! I could use some of that salt water breeze to help clear my head!
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Thanks Puppydog nice comments. Thnks for reading I am glad you enjoyed it
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I liked that small change also. Thanks
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A very pleasing poem, beautifully written and I love the comparisons. I think "calling" birds or something similar would sound better than "singing" if the row gulls make is anything to go by, but this is only my humble opinion!! Lovely picture too.
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VERY BEAUTIFUL!
There is nothing more beautiful than to see two in love walking in the sand along the shore.
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great rictameter, with a wonderful use of language. I really enjoyed this write!
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Dear Spiritual Poet,
I love the romance you placed with your words.
Good Luck in the contest!
Tang -
A beautiful rictameter! You paint a lovely picture here!
Blessings,
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Thanks for the very kind comments. I also love the seashore. I currntly live about 100 yards from the shore and I love it. I enjoy this form a lot.
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Spiritual Poet, this a well done rictameter about the seashore. I liked that you used "seashore" for your opening and closing lines, one of my favorite places to be. Very nice poetical techniqiues used, I liked this alot. Good luck in the contest.
Susie
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