Butterflies
Butterflies are pretty things
Carry nature on the wings
Life they made us colorful
Painting nature beautiful
Sucking love with affection
Kissing them in creation
Humming songs on flowers' lips
Dancing breeze on their hips
Dancing flowers' nearby
Whispering ears with lullaby
Caressing flowers with dreams
Smiling at us with beams
Fondling us to be cheerful
Leaving us all wonderful
Are they not God's messages
For life to go on for ages
Author notes
butterflies add beauty to nature and our life
Written August 18th, 2006.No.49
Butterflies are pretty things
A contest entry
- Battle of the sexes (contest - please come and join in = ) by SarahD.
300 points, ended August 28, 2006, 12 entries
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What did you think
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Butterflies are quite beautiful, you wrote about them well. The last line is kinda off, because you rhymed throughout, but messages & ages do not rhyme. I think if you rewrote that last line it would be a really good poem. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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i forgot this
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This is very beautiful! Very magical and dreamy. Nicely written with a good rhyme and flow.
I would change the word "the" in line two to "their". Also the line: "Life they made us colorful" does not sound right. I have two suggestions for it, you can do it either "Life, they made IT ,FOR us colorful" or "Life, they made IT colorful"
Thank you for entering this beautiful poem in my contest. Good luck and keep on writing,
Nooni
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Awwwww sweetness creatively penned, i can see them daintely fluttering around ,like the ones you feel in your stomach when you are in love
good luck in the contest with this sweet little poem
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they do aye, such a shame they only live for a brief time and are collected and paraded on walls lol a good poem. good luck in the contest. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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thank you for entering with this very sweet little nature poem, yes i agree butterflies are very lovely indeed and brighten up a summers day. good luck in the contest with this rather cute nature poem
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Hi! I thank you for your entry, but maybe you didn't understand the rules of this contest??? We are looking for humorous writes about the opposite sexes annoying habits! If you enter a pre write you must enter a new poem too and you MUST put the message in the author box. So, I thank you for taking the time to enter, but could you please read the rules again?? Thanks so much! Sarah
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thank you for your comment.i don't write poetry.poetry happens to me .so i can't agree with you that it is forced rhyming
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Yes, indeed they do, but your forced rhyming was rather bad...
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