Life moves along the breeze
Sometimes it lifts us
Sometimes we just float
And sometimes we fall
It's then I will walk beside you
Comfort you
Hold you
For you have lifted my wings so many times
Inside I fly
Caught on the breeze
It shakes us, till we tremble
Stirs us till we cry
But when the breeze catches your face
Head on
Hold on
Be held within
For then your wings will open
Outside the ether
You'll fly
Caught on the breeze
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Written April 13th, 2003
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bonn!
Very peaceful, well written. -
Thanks hun.. yeah.. she is my sistah and you know it
and sometimes we go flying LOLOLOLOL
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this is very beautiful gillchill, it has suz all over it.
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Warmly reassuring. Maybe the breeze can feel out of control, but it beats the heck out of landing hard. Lovely.
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Ah
Sis Gill
Nice to find one so uplifting full of hope and sublime
Floating on that breeze with ya
Luv this one hun
I got 3 or 4 new ones
I sent ya some e mail too lol
Love it hun
Luv you too
Susan
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i like it.. although i must confess.. your author pick.. i love the pig tails.. tee hee.... everybody else is too concerned with everything being perfect.. when all you need things to be is wonderful.. atleast that's my four cents.. chaka boom baka..
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Excellent! Very nicely done!
Love the feeling your beautiful poem gave me, Gill! Have you read my poem "Dreams of Flying"? Some said it gave them the feeling that they were...
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man, dave took my thunder. i was going to mention the scene from forrest gump where the leaf is floating up in the air. that is what this reminded me of. (that WAS in forrest gump, wasnt it?) anyway, i wont EVER comment on what i think is trite or not, especially on a personal poem such as this. not my place to tell you what or how to feel, and then how you SHOULD express those feelings. i liked it for its honesty, and thats what matters.
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This seems very trite to me, maybe I've just seen Forrest Gump to many times. I do not want you to feel like I am insulting you, I am not, this just seems to be a topic in poetry that has been worked to death. But I guess everything in life has been written about, I just haven't had time to read it all yet. You always have a great deal of imagry in your worx, I enjoy that, like a chocolate doughnut, can't get enough of them. Please don't feel offended if I say I think your poem is trite, it is, but so are the finer things in life. Dave
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This found a smile on my face today!
I needed it!
Yes...
you found a way to touch my heart & soul!
Thank you giving me hope!
Keep finding those places that I've never been to before!
Keep penning on my friend! -
It's then I will walk beside you
Comfort you
Hold you
For you have lifted my wings so many times
Inside I fly
Caught on the breeze
Like a prayer. So lovely the images you portray in this piece. well done
~Mary O
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Ahhhh this is very nice Gilly...
Kinda got a 'breezy' feel about it excuse the pun.
Made me smile
Jadey xXxXx
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gill this is so stunning. a very inspirational piece... i hate to say this but it should b in a card... but i do mean that in the nicest of ways. its truly beautiful and something that anyone would love to hear. well penned hon,
huge hugs and lots of loves to u and yours,
(hope everything going gr8 for u),
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Myra, Red and La.. thankyou for your wonderful words.. made my day.. and it's still early yet
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"did you ever know that you're my heeeee-roooo...." sorry, i got reminded of that when i read this. it had a bet midler effect on me. kind of a footprints in the sand feel to it as well. all in all very good nurse lady.
much repsect.
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Gil this is beautifully written. You are in a different place lately. I see through your work. Hopeful beautiful write my freind.
Red -
Ah, Gill! Of course you are flying! And you are the wind under other wings, too ... Thank you for a beautiful poem. It was so good to read it. Never stop writing.
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excellent
wonderful job , I want to fly too....think I have a poem up called just that " I want to fly " it is a pretty old one. This was wonderful.....and as the saying goes , may the sun always be in your face and the wind at your back ...............also this reminded me of a friendship poem, telling a friend that you will be there to pick them up , when life's breeze knocks them down
Thx for reading about RICARDO
There will be more to come , hehehe
Reenie -
Thanks everyone for your wonderful comments all I want to do is fly.. and you all help
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this is really lovely Gill
very hopeful indeed
and ALi does flap them wings so well dont she ??
lol
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ray of light in the darkness
beautiful, full of hope and love. makes a persons heart light to read stuff like this.
hehe, reminds me kind of the carefree (appearing) chickadees that i can see chittering at each other right outside my window this morning.
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It's nice to be able to hold that kind of affection and confidence towards someone, not everyone will be that fortunate. The wind/wings theme has the potential to be cliched, but you made good use of it here. Liked the bit "head on, hold on," a good break. -Zaotik
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GREAT JOB
I enjoyed this so much your words flow like the wind, Great Job -
Absolutely gorgeous ...... I am flapping my wings
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beautiful. Stirs something almost forgotten in the deepest realms of one's soul.
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with the eyes of a tiger and wings that will RISE!!!
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ride the tiger Gill.
well in this case the pheonix..either way...
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Love you gilly.
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ahhhh a beautiful write Gill. Love the breeze on a hot summers day when it blows in ya face. But sometimes that breeze can be so cold it numbs you too the bone. This is beautiful simply beautiful.
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Lovely
Oh how beautiful! Wonderful write... so true, too. Life is funny, how you can float.... and then fall. Fickle as a pickle it is! Can't decide if it's sour or sweet. But there's always SOMEONE there to help you through it, no matter who you are. Ah, I loved this so much *dances* -
What stunning imagery you have created here, Gill...
Who hasn't dreamed of soaring like a bird,
and when we are in love, sometimes that is just what it feels like. A lovely write.
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