You still live?
You still breathe?
I had life
I had purpose
and you took that from me
I was just a little girl
A little girl that had big dreams
and you took that from me...
Why?
I don't understand.... I was only six
You looked into my green eyes and took my life
Who are you to do that?
I hear my daddy and my mommy cry...although mommy is with me now
You think you are going to get away with this
You think there will be a big enough crack for you to slip through
but there is Someone who is always watching...and he sees you
HE SAW YOU...
I have nothing else to say.... except that I know for sure that
You won't get away...
JonBenet Ramsey
Author notes
This is a poem about the little girl who never got to speak.
Kay Anders 
Written August 17th, 2006
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i like it a lot.
I really could not remember if i had commented this. I know it's old .. but I never get on here.. so yeah. If i haven't commented it.. I love it. I just added a new poem. tell me what you think. -
This happens to children everyday and it needs to be stopped. Such a young and beautiful girl lost to the world.
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this is well written, the expression is strong and portrayed well. though the momentum does seem to drop slightly near the end... but this is barely noticeable as the begining is strong enough to make sure that the read keeps going regardless.
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Abuse is a terrible thing and often times those who need to be heard are never heard. You've done a good job of expressing this. great work
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awww that makes me want to cry. i hate people who do this to others...
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wow
very strong write. thanks for sharing.i'm sure many kids can relate to this one.
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very nicely done, ironically I was thinking of Jon Benet when I was reading this ... then saw it was about her, I read it again wondering what made me think specifically of her and I have no earthly clue...so having said that... well done
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I remeber this story in the news. I never knew what it really was about though. Then they made it into a movie, I think. Such a young life, gone.
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It's sad, but oh so very good.keep writing.
sincerely,Cassie.
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Thank you so much for the comment...hopefully both..
KAY
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Very powerful Kay.... Sorry for the lateness of my response! Someone will pay for the actions committed to this little one. If not now... then during the afterlife. Nothing goes unpaid for. ~Ange~
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KAY LOVE YOUR WORK !IM SPEACHLESS!
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you fear no pain because you have no heart? bull! Sierra Nicely has one of the biggest hearts i know of...lol....
oh yeah and Jamie and me aren't friends anymore....i am tired of everything about jamie in her eyes,....she is a self centered brat and I don't want to be her friend just because i feel sorry for her anymore.... sierra you are one of my best friends but i won't deal with her anymore... i remember when you said there will be a day when she has no friends and she is going to wish she would have thought about someone else besides herself and that day has come....she is going to hang out with dezi....the freak who talks behind her back and then that will blow up soon so.....she has just about nobody....i am sorry sierra i tried...but she isn't walking over me anymore
your friend,
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wow that has kay anders stamped all over it! I was thouroughly moved by the poem and congradulate you on your work keep it up
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-nods- Lovely, though I agree with the first comment. Children see in the eyes of the innocent. I should know, I'm 12. Although my vocabularly has in a way forced me to grow up, by being treated as an adult. Ah well...Now i'm sad, again ¬¬
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and practice and practice....meez got it....lol...they let that asshole go! His hometown is about three hours away from mine....I have good mind to go scare the living shit out of that moron...whether he did it or not is besides the point..the fact that he entertains the idea of killing little girls makes me want to go scratch on his window and make him piss in his pants..... I am not a nice person when it comes to tampering with innocense....makes me sick....literally sick..
KAY
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Ah, a current affairs poem. If I'm not misinformed, the evidence is still pretty inconclusive as to who the murderer is. I still remember the big fuss that was made about the JonBenet case from ten or so years ago. I'm pretty sure several thousand less well known children have been raped and murdered, at least as brutally, since. Wonder why they're not mentioned or talked about on the news? Not sensational enough I suppose.
Well I won't pick on this too much. I'd still like to see you incorporate more concerete visual references when you get into topics like this, but soon I'll have an assignment for you to use in practicing this. If you'll let me catch up with all your posts.
Just for reference--an idea, from the first few lines, for how this could have been approached more visually (as it stands you basically have a concept draft that could be flushed out with visual depictions):
You still live?
You still breathe?
That same breath that panted
sick excitement and rage
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Excellent
Very Good indeed. I could see her looking down uttering these lines. Sorry it took so long to respond but I was on vacation. Keep up the great work. Take care.
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this was absolutely amazing... i never really thought about the Ramsey case before now, because i was only 7 when it first happened, but now that its in the news again its really made me think... i mean, i was only a year older than her and cannot imagine never getting a chance to grow into the person i am today...she had that opportuniy stolen from her... your poem sums up about all the things running through my head about this whole case. perhaps, maybe, she was speaking through you, it seems that way to me anyway. beautiful write.
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Thank you Puppydog....your words mean a lot...and even if this isn't the man...the poem isn't directed at him ... it is directed at the real killer...and i guess that only JonBenet knows that now...once again Thank You....
KAY
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SO TOUCHING!
Her case was on tv so much when she disappeared, so much publicity, maybe the one will never be caught for I feel that this man they have found now did not do it, it is just a feeling I have, I feel the one who did it is much closer to home, her soul will speak out in the end and be heard. A most touching poem!
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Thank you Bryan! Your words are very moving....one of the greatest comments i have had on my work in months....Thank you!
KAY
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Simply amazing
Kay from the moment I saw the part about the girl being six I knew who you were talking about. As much as Id like to believe that this guy did it, he said he drugged the little girl then raped her. They did an optopsy and there were no traces of drugs and no evidence of rape. He might have done it for publicity. BUT! This was very well written, and the fact is the little girl was murdered. Her murdere might not of been the man they have found, but it is like Jane Doe. When they cannot identify a dead body it is named Jane Doe, so I guess now that we dont know who really killed the little girl a hundred percent we now have a Ramsey. Everyone here listen - This is the start of recognition. Lets go on from here and protect our kids for they are our future - and no future, no hopes. Maybe this will change the law? You kill two little kids and you get off in fifteen years with a few more of probation yet if you accidentally kick a puppy and it dies, you get life in prison or even the capital punishment. Also know that kay has pointed out another VERY critical point. He can slip through a crack and get away from what is STATED to be the capital punishment, but the true capital punishment is that this man will forever be shunned, looked down apon and treated as the monster he is. THAT is the capital punishment - Not being able to sleep at night because the screams of green eyed innocents pounds at your brain, distorting every last moment and thought that you once could have held decent and peaceful. It is equivilat in exchange for now you have no peaceful moments as this child has no moments at all. It is equivilant but NOT FAIR. Well done Kay, and thank you for these amazing words for that amazing girl
write always,
-Bryan
PS. I am doing with my last points to promote this. Im using my last 58 points to my name to also put forth the effort for not only this little girl to be known but for ALL the screams in the night, men women children a like. -
Good
Very well written
We will have to see how the true story unfords
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AWESOME.. very meaningful.. I love it..I agree that she might had said that if she could .. but I imagine in a softer tone.. but still a wonderful piece non the less.love ya gurl~Ash
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Excellent Work
This is an excellent write, Kay! Very impressive and might well be what Jon Benet might have said, had she had the opportunity. On the other hand, as an innocent she would have a very forgiving heart and would forgive even her killer. I do think, however, that we need to not pass judgment on the man they have arrested: it seems there are strong discrepancies in his confession. So, at the moment, it appears that he simply is claiming to have done, either for the attention or he has a death wish.
Well done, hon! Love and hugs, B♥nnieQ 
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