In the Wake of Death
In a darkened dream state,
awake with eyes closed.
You scream aloud,
but your silence is heard.
Taken from an unaltered reality,
brought to a raptured coma.
The darkness, thick as blankets
envelop you tightly.
Suffocating you until your
last breath is taken.
As the sweat pours from your body,
salty and dingent.
You peer into nothingness,
staring into a blackened abyss.
Your fear sets in...
You search to find a place to hide.
There is no escape
as you fall to your knees.
Your begging is useless
and all in vein.
The darkness will consume you.
Taking over your life,
like a bad drug.
And poison your mind,
like a bad love.
Feeding your anger,
fueled by addiction.
Stricken by fear and aggression.
You lay down quietly.
Struggling...
for freedom from your chains
that bind you.
It is here.
It is now.
You take your last breath.
Until your body lies
upon the cold, damp floor.
Lifeless, without a soul.
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Written August 17th, 2006
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Nicely written.. I like the relativeness that this possesses with drug addiction. You words brought out an intense feeling in this piece, placing our minds into the 'big picture' and forcing us to see the harsh reality of this poem. Goodluck and thank you for your deep entry!
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Very very intense piece, my friend
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Breathtaking oh my dear.
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Thank you very much for your comment. I am glad that you enjoyed this.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Deep!
Wow...this was a very dark it gave me chills...it was almost u walked in my heart on this write. You did very good. Thanks for sharing huney
Kari -
thanks for reading this and commenting Tink. I appreciate it.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Thank you Krystal for commenting on this. I appreciate it.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
thank you very much for your comment.I appreciate it. glad you liked it.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
A very dark prediction you have made! "And we all fall down" I suppose this could be told to anyone in reality! Intense write,
♥ Tink -
Struggling...
for freedom from your chains
that bind you.
It is here.
It is now.
You take your last breath.
Until your body lies
upon the cold, damp floor.
Lifeless, without a soul.
such freedom is feared, becasue it is unknown.. and we humans have allways feared the unknown...
Great write, I really enjoyed it...Darkness can sometimes be a good thing.
Krystal
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this poem was really good! so dark and gripping. your emotions evoked the demons of the world to come out and take over. and i'm sure that if the world screamed these words aloud,each soul would feel the power in the words. i loved one part especially:
"The darkness will consume you.
Taking over your life,
like a bad drug.
And poison your mind,
like a bad love.
Feeding your anger,
fueled by addiction."
it sounds like a gripping depression that one is chained to. with no way to get free. that part,was the part that stood out the most to me. amazing job,loved each word of it.
*autumn*
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