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Tears

Tears flutter down my face,
Just like a flowing waterfall,
Losing elegance and grace,
Making me look ten inches tall.

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Written August 17th, 2006

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  • Frodofan silver member
    August 20, 2006
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    The last line does not quite have the same beat as the rest... perhaps if you subtracted the "ten?" It is a nice piece that says a lot.


  • Devilish Temptation
    August 17, 2006
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    Really touching it's short but it gets to you non the less I think it is an outstaning verse and it hits home
    thanks for sharing