This man was a friend of dark
He never let light shine upon his face
So no human knew of his looks
Till one day a little girl stumbled upon him,
The little girl walked in to this mans home
She asked sir do you know how to get to the store
He said no I don't I never leave my house
She asked why my good sir
He told her I would show you but I never go upon the light
She said sir how old are you
he said I'm only 16 why?
she said well I'm 16 also,and blind
he said so how would your beautiful face look upon mine?
she said I feel and see in my mind
the man said fine you may feel upon my face and see
So the girl walked to him and felt
She said that's weird I don't feel anything
the man said that's because I have no face
the girl laughed thinking it was a joke
but she did not phaeton that he was telling the truth
He said don't laugh its true
She was shocked
the man said I figured you would act like that
she said how where you born with no face
He said my face faded
the more I lied about my self my face disappeared
The girl goes "that makes no sense."
he said but if you think about it,it does
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Written August 17th, 2006
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o.O, this is very different in a good way. I have not read quite a style like this before, yes, very unique. I like your style and it really does seem like your words just topple out of your head onto the paper, your imagery is amazing with the words you use. Wow
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Wow this is very interesting and different then most stuff I've read lately. But I really like it. You painted an amazing image with the words. Great job.
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Thank you. I am glad it touched you in some way. Also your right %100
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Wow! I mean 'Wow!' Yes, it's not good to lie at all. You don't have to feel ashamed of yourself just because you failed an exam, or you don't have a good house, or anything like that. Just tell the truth no matter what. However you not always have to be saying the truth. It depends. -
yeah i know what you mean do you have aim or yahoo? i could help you if you want with writing funny stuff if you want its not hard. Also thank you very much I love comments on my work even though i dont get alot
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I think what i'm trying to express is that you don't follow any pattern, so it makes all your poetry different and therefore your style is quite unique.
I like that you open your head and let the words pour out.
Life would be boring if we were all the same!
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Lol thanks I think. I never had anyone tell me i was unique. I mostly write whats in my head.
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I think i'm the opposite! i write dark and wish i could use humour and be more lighthearted!
You are a very good writer regardless, i've read a couple of yours now and they are very nicely written with lovely use of words....they roll of the tongue but you write in a very unique way.
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thank you very much but i dont write alot of dark ones. I mean if you look at mine there mostly love and humour kind of poems I wish i could write more dark ones
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Well it's very good. I love dark poetry and especially something that unfolds and has a story as you read through.
I shall keep my eyes open for more from you!
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Thank you. Its is actually based on a drawing i never finished. I drew a picture of me but never finished the face and i just made a story line upon that.
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How interesting! I got goosebumps as i raced to the end, to find out how and why!
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