A blackened rain falls tonight
Marring our violent world
As hands claw the flesh of time
Searching for their sanity
Twin blue moons sing a lament
For the death of affection
And somewhere in the darkness
Another innocent screams
Humanity is dying
And stinks of decaying hearts
Now the reaper takes his fill
Of all the forsaken souls
Crosses posses no meaning
And the masses weep with grief
The demise of man's spirit
Has left us all in torment
All colors have blurred to gray
As bleeding eyes do cry
And while our leaders party
Another angel screams
Author notes
I closed my eyes and thought of sorrow and this is what I saw.
Written August 17th, 2006
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I found this to be an incredibly enjoyable read, it flowed beautifully and your imagry was amazing. You certainly created the entire scene for the reader to see in their head.
That said I am disapointed that you did not read my rules before entering this piece. There is a complete lack of punctuation through out the whole piece, which is something that I insisted on.
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U write some powerful stuff. I liked all of it, I can really feel your emotions (Im crazy shhh). My fav line is, look below
Humanity is dying
And stinks of decaying hearts
Now the reaper takes his fill
Of all the forsaken souls -
I LOVE the repetition with "another innocent screams" and "another angel screams". very nice. plus, these are my favorite lines of the poem:
"Humanity is dying
And stinks of decaying hearts"
Very real, great imagery. Splendid write!
Good luck in my contest!
Thanks for entering,
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really good poem I like
I like this stanza
A blackened rain falls tonight
Marring our violent world
As hands claw the flesh of time
Searching for their sanity
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Such control over language. Never felt a message so strongly, I'm actually im phsyical pain.
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Great imagery here, you really made me feel the pain of the earth. I love the line "another angel screams" purely for the image of it. Good write and good luck in the contest!!
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Thank You! That makes me so happy! ~Lilly~
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Wow...thats all I can say right now is wow. And i mean wow in a good way dont worry. So yea...damn, this poem is great...ill defenitly consider it for first second or third place.
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Beautifully dark
I liked your use of imagery here, so many deep thoughts within just a few verses.
Your choice of words were graceful and you had a lovely flow.
Very dark and beautiful.
Thank you for entering and I wish you good luck in this contest.
Hope you're ok, take care and be safe.
Lauz. xXx -
Thank you!
Thank you.
I wrote it for a contest but when I clicked 'Add Poem' the next page said the contest had just been closed early so I didn't get to enter it. 
Oh, well; at least I had fun writing it. Thank you for reading and commenting on my work! Blessed Be! ~Lilly~ 
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this is beautiful. there's so much imagery, which connects the reader with the poem. Amazing work!!
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