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Edge

As I raise my sword

I praise the lord

Then let loose and do
what this blade was for.

Following through into you
with words that pour
out of my mind
and into yours.

I'm out of my mind,
been here before...
although I don't recognize
anything anymore.

I'm lost in a fight
with a heart that is sore.

I try to open my eyes
in hope to find something pure...

But all I can find
is an endless war.

Fighting for our pride,
the same thing we'll die for.

A contest entry

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  • Ellis gold member
    July 23
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    Yeah, me too.


  • darkyinsoul
    April 14
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    Ah the quill speaks. Loved the write. Thakns for the share.


  • Confused17
    April 2
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    That is amazingly beautiful.


  • HisBreathlessDream
    October 5, 2006
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    this was beautiful and very well written hun loved it a ton of bunches lol

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    August 21, 2006
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    not sure why you felt the need to apologize in your comment box, I think this was fine, you sent a clear intent to the reader.

    good luck in the contest


  • Wandika gold member
    August 21, 2006
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    A good poem that is very powerful in its intent. Best of luck in the contest.

    Jim


  • Princess Perdue gold member
    August 21, 2006
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    Very nicely written, and the rhyme was just fine.Well done and good luck in the contest.

    Shaz xx


  • Sandygram silver member
    August 21, 2006
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    Mighty is this wonderful poem. Best of luck in the contest. Take Care, Sandy

  • Linda Sue silver member
    August 19, 2006
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    The pen is indeed mightier than the sword. Words can be very powerful but they sometimes fail to achieve what we want. Your rhyming was fine. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. ~ Sue


  • Violent Serenity
    August 17, 2006
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    awsome

    wow, great poem, i like the sword part but yeah anyways, i think you rhymed just fine and i do like this. then the battle and everything, lovely work!!!
    keep it up!!
    ^+_+^


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    August 17, 2006
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    Wow. Very nicely done. I loved the contemporary rhyming you used. Very different and it really works well here. Best of luck in this contest. A pleasure to have read such a fine piece. ~Pam

  • Frodofan
    August 17, 2006
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    This is an interesting piece. The title is so fitting, for this a piece with a definite edge (something I crave). Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • Legend silver member
    August 17, 2006
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    There is no need to apologize in your authors comment. You have done a fine job with this piece.I get the idea that this piece is concerning a heart that is somewhat broken, craving for something that is beyond their reach. This my not be what was intended but it is what i read into it Thank you for entering Good luck in the contest

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