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'Reaper's Comin' in the Morning

Gathered amongst the gloomy fields
Lay the battered and the mourning
A wretched fate now is sealed
'Reaper's comin' in the morning

So many men have been killed
With war's dark angel soaring
The battlefield now is stilled
'Reaper's comin' in the morning

The sun will rise over the hills
But with the new light forming
For all the men that have been killed
'Reaper's comin' in the morning

Author notes

I don't know why I thought of this.  I think it's because I was listening to some old Bob Dylan songs. (particulary, "Masters of War") Well, anyways, this was all that was in my head and I wanted to write this evening. I would appreciate any sort of comment or criticism.
Written August 16th, 2006

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  • Acronym
    January 3, 2007

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    Excellent

    Personally I love dark poetry..and this one hits the spot..It puts me in the middle of a warzone..thats what it reminds me of. War. and even tho it is short its fairly well written and it satisfied my wanting in something dark such as this..Im not a fan of short poetry but this is sure one of my favs.
    -Acronym


  • quiksilver
    October 4, 2006
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    Hey! Remember me? diamarie? LOL.. This is an awesome write.. So melancholy, but really nice


  • ShelleyA gold member
    August 18, 2006
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    Hi John. An excellent dark write, deep with emotion. Very good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. You definitely paint a picture of war and the death it brings. Very good descriptives. Very nice alliteration and assonance. Well crafted. Shelley


  • sylve
    August 17, 2006
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    That is such a sad poem & so very true. I have a poem relating to war somewhere on my page that came to me as well. I hope you haven't actually lost anyone close to you.

  • Miss Yorik
    August 17, 2006
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    Dark and sad. Fitting theme for all the touble in the East right now. The idea of the reaper coming in the morning brought to mind the Medieval times when people believed that Death was a punishment from God and all that dark stuff. Kind of like an Ingmar Bergman film theme...

    This here is rather haunting, because I've never really thought about the true fact that death is a state of stillness, DARK stillness:

    With war's dark angel soaring
    The battlefield now is stilled

    Good imagery. Nice to read one of yours again.

    Melanie

  • batteredangel
    August 17, 2006
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    This poem definitely got a reaction out of me. It was creepy! But I'm a fan of rhyme and rhythm and this had both. So I give it my applause. Check out my poetry. I get a bit creepy, too.
    Edited on Aug 17, 5:56 because ''.

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