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He Loved Me



I once knew a man
so rare.. so radiant
few could walk with him

 

Born in Irish poverty
bred within the lines
of the clan.. where life demanded
real men

 

In stern tones
he made his wishes known
and built boys to men
with his hands

 

Alone.. he was known
for his fire and passion
as a man.. he was harder than stone
he forced us.. to grow

 

Against our will
he shaped and formed
six boys and four girls
all made to atone for our folly and failings

 

But in the quiet times
he would call us in
and tell a story.. and say aloud and freely
i am sorry

 

In his mind
were the names
of every general.. in every war
the history of the Irish.. and so much more

 

Later in life
he cautioned me
and gave me guidance
to last a lifetime.. for the day he was not here

 

A man of MENSA
a genius with out end
a father.. a mentor and later.. a friend
a man who taught.. me

 

How to truly be.. a real man

 

And then..

before he died
he finally said..

He Loved Me




LeeL

 

Author notes

A few overdue words for My Father.. My Mentor
Written August 16th, 2006

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  • evelynxxoo
    June 20
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    so sad and yet so rewarding everyone needs love in there life you craved it your father might of been like you as a child craving that same love from his dad and never heard the words i love you and he knew he loved you but was incapable of saying it just in case it would loosen his hold of athority i loved it i could just picture the whole scene

  • I'm glad i stumbled upon this. Wonderful work, sometimes I think it would be hard being a boy or a man...not expressing feelings until the very end...I'm glad he finally said he loved you, but I'm sad that it came until too late. Surely you must have known he loved you...

    wonderful but very sad poem.

    • Endeavor gold member
      May 3
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      I must scream


      Very nice comment to me
      I knew he loved me by all he did to counsel me
      I listen to what people say, and then I watch what they do
      What he did told the story for me

      Rick
  • Wonderful tribute. Touched a nerve with me, you described my father to the T but I didn't get the I love you.


    • Endeavor gold member
      May 3
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      Annie


      There are many fathers like mine out there
      Tom Brocoff called the "The Greatest Generation" in his book
      I think that describes him well enough
      He raised ten good men and women

      that was suficant

      Rick

  • Dygurl
    April 22
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    Strong write. a tale of truth. I'm sure he is smiling down at you and these words. Great write.

  • Molassis
    December 17, 2006

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    Seems that you had a good father... that's just awesome...

    You've written this really well... I'm sure he'd be mighty proud to read your words!

    ~Melissa


    • Endeavor gold member
      December 17, 2006
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      Melissa

      Thank you for reading

      He was very strict, espacally with the boys

      He was a powerfull writer as well

      He loved Civel War History and was a Reinactor I think it is called

      Thanks for comment

      Rick

  • Tabitha-Robin
    December 17, 2006
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    Beautiful

    This is a beautiful poem. Full of heart and admoration. I think you have done a wonderful job. It is better that what I have done. I love the way you protray your words. I love the way you map it out. It is great. Thank you for sending this lovely poem.

    Tabitha
  • Poet4theSpirit
    December 16, 2006

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    This is touching

    How wonderful that in the end he was able to say He Loved You. The Irish a stoic breed.
    They love so deep but yet unable to reach for a hug or kiss.

    My mom is full blooded Irish. The Irish I know all too well.

    But the good of it is we became Poets.
    And I have taught her from my loving heart.

    *This poem is exceptional*, your talents are many....I'm happy you loved him.

    Each line speaks and stands all on It's own.................


  • michellemybelle gold member
    November 20, 2006
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    excellent

    I have read and reread this powerful piece honoring your father. I am at a loss for words, as I am in awe.
    You captured so much in this..joy, honor, respect, sadness and love and painted such a vivid picture of this loving, yet stern man, your father.
    Thank you for sharing this with me, I shall continue to ponder over it.
    Michelle

  • Endeavor gold member
    October 18, 2006
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    Marilee, few men could tell a story better than my Dad

    He was an incredable genius, he love you a lot, guess why??

    Cause you were so Cute..lol

    Dad
  • veya
    October 18, 2006
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    i like this part:

    And then..

    before he died
    he finally said..

    He Loved Me

    I like the stong ending.
    I never really got to know grandpa. I just heard the stories. I always wished i could have known him better, maybe get some stories out of him.
    Edited on Oct 18, 4:15 p.m. because ''.

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 25, 2006
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    Just read if you likeand save your points. My dad was a Great Man. I could have been born anywhere and I was His son, as blessed by God. He was gentel and like fire. His mind was hudge, and his heart was wide open. He beat his boys to be men and we all are. He made us mountain climbers when most fail at the first hill. I pray he is with our God, Rick
  • regret me
    August 25, 2006
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    breath taking!simply pure emotion,this i have never been through personaly,but its clear as day that you have everything your father wanted to share and more,im sure you both share the same strengh also,really a picture that needs to be framed!

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Vic, to me your words say I did him a good service in writing my words here. Thank you so much, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Lynn, he was a great man and a writer him self, published in several books on poems. Mostly he taught us what was most important to live in the world. His knowledge in history was almost remarkable. I miss him, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Trista My Wife, I don`t know if I am brilliant but I will garentee I am being Honest, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Katie, Thank you for always supporting my writing no matter what I write, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Robert, I miss him a lot on some days, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Mel, you comment was great and I thank you, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Dear Iam, love you comment, thank you so much, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Thank you Linda so much for reading my words for him, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Iam,Thank you reading so many times, that is a great complement to any Poet, Rick


    Edited on Aug 17, 4:32 p.m. because ''.

  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    I had time and I read, as i was reading i was remebering our conversations and knew immediately whom this was about. It touched my every being to hear once again inyour words the remarkable man he was. I was beside myself with emotion on the heartfelt and sincerity of your words. The passion you have for a man of such love and wisdom. I am honored that you thought of me and sent me the link. I am overwhelmed with emotion, this was well written full of emotion and most of all inspiring. Thanks again for sharing and blessings to you.
    Vsutton
  • FindingFate
    August 17, 2006
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    Sweet Rick I have already read...commented above...Trina

  • August 17, 2006
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    ~stunning~
    your words are deeply heartfelt and the emotions for your Father & Mentor truly radiate in the gentleness of your words.
    your poem speaks of deep, abiding respect, honour & pride as with great care your words speak proudly of a Man whose impact guides you every day of your life.
    the last line is particularily emotional to me. to hear the words that one is loved by a parent is the greatest gift a parent can give to their children.
    your poem is very beautiful and i am deeply touched.
    thank you for sharing your memories of your admiration, gratitude and love for your Father, Mentor & Friend.
    ~simply stunning and deeply proufound~
    ~bless you and your siblings with grace~
    lynn

  • trista gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Rick,
    You've penned a very powerful piece of poetry with this one, and it has sooooo much substance to it. As a reader I walk away with a very clear picture not only of your father, but of who you became because of him. Much more to say, but will have to continue later due to time restrictions. Just one quick note:
    "But in the quite(quiet) times"

    Brilliant work, and I will gladly applaud.
    With love,
    ~J.

  • Katie Lazette
    August 17, 2006
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    Beautiful

    Hi Rick,
    A beautiful poem from your heart. I have read it several times and each time it is more beautiful than the last. I especially like the last stanza and the beautiful ending. Keep up the good writing. This is a platinum poem.

  • rlmcmd gold member
    August 17, 2006
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    Excellent

    Great poem about Dad, Rick. I am so pressed for time now I can't critique, but I know you know how I feel about this poem, It's great. Bob

  • Melodies silver member
    August 17, 2006
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    I would have liked very much for my father to have said he loved me, too. A beautiful poem, Rick. Just stunning in it's message, crafted with such skill and talent.
  • FindingFate
    August 17, 2006
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    The ending is the clincher. It pulls it all into a bow of completeness. Rick I know too many who could pen these same words for their fathers. You are a remarkable talent and man...Trina

  • poet2angels silver member
    August 16, 2006
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    Rick
    Your poem is touching and so beautiful...
    I can see the love and admiration in your words...
    Love the lines:

    "A man of MENSA
    a genius with out end
    a father.. a mentor and later.. a friend
    a man who taught.. me

    How to truly be.. a real man

    And then..

    before he died
    he finally said..

    He Loved Me"


    Excellent!
    Lynda

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 16, 2006
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    Thank you, My father was a Great Man, Rick

    Ps, I did not fully understand your comment on the ending
    I pusseled over it for sometime. It is as it was then.

  • Efflorescence
    August 16, 2006
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    Wow, this is absolutely an amazing poem. I wanted to keep reading it over and over.

    ‘In stern tones
    he made his wishes known
    and built boys to men
    with his hands’ – I love that part. It is wonderfully written.

    The ending it’s sad but at the same time not. I find this poem so strong and inspirational. Truly you did an amazing job!

    Edited on Aug 16, 8:06 p.m. because ''.
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