The roses are delicate
Assure that no petals will be lost
Instill within an indelible faith
No stems shall be broken
When one begins to pick
Infinite priers will be sent
Beseeching that care be taken
The roses are delicate
Handle with attentiveness
And ensure precaution
Author notes
Thanks so much for sending me an invite. I've noticed...your contests are never easy, but that's a good thing. I think it's wonderful that you challenge people. It took me a long long very long time to get this one. I was scrutinizing every word. I think I did better than last time, but we shall see.
Written August 16th, 2006
Option 2
Purple monkeys fly at night =]
A contest entry
- short poems by cadaver mentality.
400 points, ended August 28, 2006, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Wow Me With One Word *Platinum Edition!* =] by Anjole-Of-The-Artz.
1700 points, ended August 9, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me think by see me fly 2.
1500 points, ended August 29, 2007, 56 entries
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What did you think
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I love the simplicity and beauty of your writing style.
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ok so i'm going to try and do my best to critique this but don't hate me if its horrible.
ummmm.... i really am haveing a hard time so ummm.... yeah i have never been good at this kind of thing
ok so i really don't understand this poem and maybe its just that i'm weird but the title and the body really don't go together well
or maybe you could try adding more stanzas
sorry i couldn't be of more help
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Yes this one is kind of hard to understand. The poem is entitled "Monogomy" Which means being faithful to one's partner. I used the flower the rose to symbolize a fragile heart, a woman's heart. So I essentially Im say that a woman's heart is like a flower, it's delicate and needs to be handled with care. Thank you for reading
I hope I clarified
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Trophies are well deserved. The imagery here is excellent.
Short, but the point of the write comes across strong.
It reminds me of my times as a florist.
Flowers have a life of their own you know.. And while there.. I felt like I was a part of them. Needed them. As we once were.. Dependent on the planet to keep us alive. A harmonious relationship. Now instead of having a symbiotic relationship of mutual benefit. We've been reduced to parasites, sucking the planet dry of all of it has. -
Wonderful. I really like the lines "Handle with attentiveness/ And ensure precaution". Those last two lines give the poem an effective tone of finality, like "this is how it has to be". I think you did a very good job. Wonderful read, Fabulous write! Job well done!
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Very nice. Your language was beautiful, and had a point to it. I loved your imagery and metaphor.
Great job.
You truly deserved those trophies.
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a good piece of poetry you have written here, i enjoyed reading it very much, keep up the good work.
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this is excellent very well written piece.
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Looks like you have succeeded in two of these contests and wowed the hosts for a gold and an HM. Very creative. That first trophy is a great feeling - hope you get many more.
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Lovely poem. The title pulled me in and the poem was not what i expected. Very creative metaphor. I loved it. Congratulations on the gold.
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Love The Word
PERFECT word tehe. I loveeee it. The poem is very creative & I'll have to read it more to catch all the metaphors =] LovezIt.
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You did wonderfully. It's truly apparent that all of your hard work managed to pay off. Not a single syllable had been overlooked, and from what I can see, you took as much care with this poem as you described of the rose. You deserve that Gold.
-Nick
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looked at all your work love it like it very cool and super kep it up x
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Thank you for reading!!! It's my first and only trophey poem
I'm so proud.
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Wow, that was amazing. The words just seemed to flow really smoothly and effortly. Keep writing great job!is was a great read
one of the better poems and its sad its not longer,, but i loved it -
Yeah, I understand what you mean. It's kind of a hidden message. I could explain if you like
Thanks for commenting! This is by far the most personal, the best, and favorite poem that i've written. I'm so happy I won a trophey for it! And it's my first!
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Oh, and congratulations on your trophy. Right on!
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Short, but warm, tender and full. The emotion in here was so well poured out and inviting and sweet. The tone was like a breath softly spoken, it was almost beseeching. You gave a warning, but only before giving all of yourself. Beautifully enchanting.
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Can I pick a rose without bruising it? Can I tear off a petal, forgetting to weep? Sweet smelling flower so tender to touch. Teach me why you mean so much.
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monogamous
very pretty read.but i guess it is as the saying goes...a rose by any other name...and the like.very interestingly done and i had to keep going back to the title to make sure i was were i thought i was after reading the first few lines so that was fun if mildly confusing.funny how the mind comes up with its own expectations based on a single word -
Whooooa...I truly like this poem. The flow was perfection and the words just as beautiful as anything I've read today...Thank you.
Love,
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Um totally lost on the name and the poem but i'm sure it has total meaning for you. Really. It's short, It's sweet, and it's very too the point though. I liked the way you used the roses to describe something even more fragile then that. It looks like you put alot of thought and effort into this poem and I'm really glad that I took the time to come read it. It's touching. Keep up the good work and write some more.
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This is really good. I don't know why but I did have a bit of a problem following it. But it just may be because my minds on other things today. I do like it though.
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Excellant / fun/romantic
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um, congrats! I didn't notice that you've already won! Great job!
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I think that your word choice is impeccable. The skill that you possess shows through this write. It's simply a mirror reflection of perfection. Great job on this write and good luck in the contest.
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Excellent
You have done much better this time. I am impressed.
This is a great metaphor. Your word choice is excellent and you were able to hold my interest all the way through. I was thinking that you may have not used two devices until I saw the repitition in it.
I would like to see, especially when it is so important and part of the poem, the title underlined in the body of the poem.
I also like to see a little room between the end of the poem and the legal crap that AP has to put there. Look at any of my poems and you will see what I mean.
You used the word priers, which means snoops or people who inquire closely, where you meant priors. What you thought it meant is not quite it. I like priers, it fits your poem well.
You also used a pronoun that I did not list so there is no deduction for that. 'One' is a pronoun as it is used
Overall this is very, very well done. camen
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Thanks for entering. camen
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No it's priers as in people that pray. Thanks so much for the comment
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I think the metaphor is well done and well built, your language is complex, good, I liked reading it alot as each line packs alot of meaning compactly. Priers is my only question, is that something specific to a rose? I can't seem to get a good confirm on that, I only read it as people that pry.
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great metaphor
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Very well written. Sadly i'm not sure who this poem pertains to monogamy but then again i've never been all that great at getting metaphores but none the less, it is great and sweet in it's self!
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Fantastic.. I loved the flow and imagery.
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Wonderfully written!
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