Thoreau
came to mind
when I saw you pass--
when I looked into your eyes gazing back at
mine, as green, alive as Walden's pond early
in spring would have been.
His words find
me & gather my feelings into one mass:
The question is not what you look at,
but what you see.
Perhaps I see more than other men
have. I see you as you
see yourself--stronger than your voice
& the curves of your body
would have men believe.
I see you as words I must gather.
Poetry has room for you
like Thoreau's woods of choice
wherein individuality
& perputual youth dwelt. I retrieve
the memory of your passing glance, elated rather.
Author notes
Written August 16th, 2006
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I enjoy reading as you do--one poem at a time. I'm pleased that you would visit it 4 times and thrilled that you did. Thank you so much for saying so much without having anything to say.
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oneLuckygirl,
To help you remove your blind spot, I must say you feel like they ar a burp. The breaks are intentional. They signify the rhyme scheme I often use in order to disguise rhyme. I hope to post edits to the poem tomorrow. Come back and read it on Friday.
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Wendy,
Thanks for wanting to read this poem a second time. I have made corrections to it, but I have not posted the edits yet. Perhaps tomorrow. I'm working on a new book of poetry: Stealing A Woman. This is one of the poems I will include. -
Beauitful poem!! I liked it alot. The imagery was great! Great write! Keep up the fabulous writing!!
Your Ap daughter,
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Beautiful poetry! I loved the lines I see you as words I must gather. Poetry has room for you... - to me that says it all...to find the words like the "big poets" do to paint this scene, the emotions, the love... My kind of poetry indeed and worth waiting for.
~ Nicolette
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One of the beauties of being fed one poem at a time, as we are at AP, is that we are likely to visit the good ones numerous times before the next emerges. That's how it is with your work - I keep coming back. This is my 4th visit to this one, I think, not really having anything of significance to say about it, just enjoying it.
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Delicate and beautiful. A joy to
read, but what gives with
those line breaks? They
felt like a burp in the middle of a
gorgeous soliloquy.
Help me remove my blindspot. -
oh yea, my kind of poem... intoxicatingly beautiful.
i want to read it again :-)
~ Wendy
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Thanks for the yay! Jaden--appreciate you...
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yay! an mt poem . . .
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