I know it's goodbye,
and this will be our last kiss.
I have but one request......
Kiss me goodbye in the rain,
so the raindrops falling
on our faces, can blend with
my tears and I will share
one last moment with you.
Goodbye My Love
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Written August 15th, 2006
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RAINDROPS or TEARS
You've said a lot in a few lines. Goodbye's are not easY. Our life is a series of hello's and goodbye's. Thank you for your poem. -
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I see I have already commented.... Iknew it looked familiar... I was so excited.. I thought you had a new pen when I saw you in the featured section! I shall wait patiently, just pleased to see you active again
~Tia
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Wonderfully simply and beautiful. Great job thanks for sharing this poem with each of us. Melody
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This is simple and pretty. It makes me sort of sad because my boyfriend and i just broke up, but i think that i would want our last kiss to be in the rain so that he wouldn't see me crying,or that it would habve ended in such an amicable fashion. I don't even remember our last kiss...
Arielle -
Wow, I absolutely love this poem! It's so sad yet sweet at the same time. I love it when it rains when I cry. The rain hides the pain, which you portrayed when you described the tears and rain blending. Great write!
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Very good
Increadable power and humility. I feel the deep ache in the words of regret. You may like "Fond Dispaire" about unrequeted love, Rick -
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a beautiful image----the rain mixing with the teardrops and vice/versa. And at the same time passers-by would not be able to tell that it is the teardrops that you are wiping from your face. This is so sadly romantic (actually I think romance holds a lot of sadness) but it is seldom talked or written about) But real romance is not the dozen roses or the diamonds.....it is the breaking heart that so often accompanies it for all sorts of different reasons
Much love and a big BRAVO
xoxoxo
reenie
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Gulp. (Choking back the tears here). Bittersweet but exquisite writing!
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how sad is this poem
but how true
ive felt this same pain
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Excellent
Though brief, this poem packs a powerful punch. I could just imagine kissing a lover goodbye in the pouring rain. What a different way for a relationship to end. I think you did an outstanding job of showing the sorrowful end to this relationship. -
This is so sad. I hate the thought of losin my love. It's romantic the way it is set up, but so so sad. You did a wonderful job. It's short but it's like the whole story is put into it. Great job. Keep up the great work.
Love Always,
Caitlin -
I felt your pain in your words.
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Soulful, I like the name by the way, I found this to well done in it simplist and yet tender manner. I think you make good use of emotion. image and Visions and thank you for commenting on seducive affair.
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Wow. This was so amazing in its very simplicity. You didn't fill it with unnecessary fluff, as I like to call it. You get your point across quite beautifully. Wonderful work. I just might add you to my favorites now. ^_^
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Ah dear soulful poet, you brought tears to my eyes..I hate goodbyes..this was very heartfelt, so touching..I feel the love you have for this person..and the sadness between your lines ..touching but beautifuly written as usual
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this fits with the one you just read of mine. at least for me. i love it.
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this is amazing. short means nothing when that kind of love is expressed in such few lines. i really enjoy your work, i only wish to be half as good as you one day.
summerzac -
ooh so sad . is this good bye forever or just a while, it matters not . the emotion is the same..xxx
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This was beautiful. I loved it. The ending was perfect. Great job. Oh, and thanks for commenting on my poem too.
Amanda -
Bittersweet, sweet in a romantic way, bitter because of the way it ends, well done
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what was the question
you know it starts there,outside waiting in the cold.kiss me once in the snow,i swear it never gets old.ill promise you i will make it warmer next year.i dug those words of yours.does soulfull woman mean youre black? just wondering.im trying to formulate the best possible mental image i can for nocturnal emissions.any help is more than welcome -
Oh my, you move me my dear. I have tears in my eyes! Bravo!!!
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This is sooooooo sad, and heartfelt! I love it! Keep that pen flowing!
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beautiful
ooh too sad i feel it skin deep xxx -
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I believe this is missing nothing. Less is more applies here, it gives a visual and a feeling in a few short words... is that not what we want to accomplish? Good write -
After reading it several times I found it to be missing something. Perhaps the wording. A great write from a simple thought...Still, I applaud it...
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That is beautiful... goodbyes are a very hard thing to handle but I think that you described it wonderfully. Short and sweet; the best way. Good work!
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This is a beautiful write. I really loved it and like you said earlier you do write a lot of sad poetry. (I skimmed thru your page a bit). This was very touching and a nice ode to a lost loved one, this was short and sweet and when it comes to goodbyes you should never draw them out. Excellent piece.
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i think everyone has felt like this... the shortness of it was perfect and its so full of emotion....
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This is beautiful.
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this was a wonderful heartfelt peice. Thanks for sharing it. Blessings
vsutton -
So heart touching. Accepting of the departure as best as can be..but concealing the pain within the rain..for the rain to disquise your tears. Wonderfully powerful in such a short write. I loved it and can relate to it all too well. Keep writing and thank you for sharing.
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I really liked this piece.Well done.
You shared a piece of your heart with this piece and you did it so well.
Length is something that only the writer can decide and I personal like short pieces it draws more of picture -
Wow! Another beautiful and moving piece.
Although short, this was really sweet and heartfelt.
I really enjoy reading your work here.
Thanks for sharing this and keep it up!
Allen0826
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