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Clara

Clara steps out in armor.
She's of the school of Athena,
She's a regular jaw breaker.
Pictured on her tin breast plate,
Deflecting heartache,
A two-faced statue with asps in her eyes.
Clara, you are lost to thought.
Even born of a split skull
You are stoic when bloodied.

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Written August 15th, 2006

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  • TheseLivesThree
    October 6

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    Sexcellent

    This reminds me of you in some deep dark way I can't quite pin point. I think it may be the innate ferocity of this woman. Anywho, liked it.


  • lithium
    January 16, 2008

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    I'm sure you have a little Clara in you Proxy...i thought it was VERY good... not too long, and the fall of the mighty Clara is still a thing of beauty...she carries herself through all walks of life with honor
    nice poem
    love ya
    ~~lithium

  • The Monster
    November 28, 2006
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    She's a regular jaw breaker eh? I love the language. Good Piece.


  • Proxy
    August 17, 2006
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    A.) If I wanted to try to beat somebody I'd enter a contest.
    B.) I'm not really sure what you're talking about either. Maybe you just don't make sense.
    C.) Thanks for the 1/4 of your comment that actually had to do with my whatever-this-is. I'll consider adding to it.

    Congratulations on obtaining points with the babbling of an inbriate, though!
    Edited on Aug 17, 3:06 p.m. because ''.


  • JohnWaynePalsy
    August 17, 2006
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    short

    i have an answer to this ,i think,in my half drunken(by my standards)state i think i got you beat and im not even sure what im talking about but lets see what i can come up with.if i do come up with it it will be called emma you can read and decide .if i come up with anything that is.this was too short is all i really have to say

  • Son of Jim
    August 16, 2006
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    mythological. Very full of images and the character designatio is quite compelling, good poem, I am glad I read.

  • Morgan LeFay
    August 16, 2006
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    iiiinteresting
    i like the edgy-ness you have created here
    a very well done character sketch, she almost steps off the page to glare at the reader


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    August 15, 2006
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    I liked this. Is Clara a character that you have created and will write more? Just curious. I think you can do alot with her..Very good piece.. Keep it up..Thanks for sharing.
    Soulful Woman

  • jacob erin-cilberto
    August 15, 2006
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    i like the feel of this piece,,,and i get the idea of clara, being stoic, yet deadly,,meaning even in her coldness she can hurt you like she has been hurt in the past,,
    nicely written poem,,enjoyed the read,,,muchly!


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    August 15, 2006
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    Very nice piece filled with great images, loved the form and flow. great write. keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny

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