Another sleepless night with you on my mind
I wish I could take this clock and turn back time
Because, baby, I have to tell you the truth
I’ve been going crazy with only the thought of you
I realize now there were some things I shouldn’t have said
But every last word of it was screaming in my head
I love you, honey, and its making me insane
I don’t know how much longer I can live with this undying pain
I miss your smiling face and the sound of your sweet voice
And when I was in your arms I knew I made the right choice
If only you could see the many burning tears I’ve shed
And known how many restless nights I’ve spent awake in bed
It’s my undying love for you that keeps me this way
And it’s those three silent words I want to say
I love you
Author notes
Written August 14th, 2006
A contest entry
- Love's Many Faces by Silly Rabbit..
600 points, ended May 22, 2008, 56 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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....Beautiful... Absolutely beautiful..
I'm sucker for these kind of poems, especially right now, because this poem reminds me of practically exactly how I am feeling at the moment.
And the rhyming, I absolutely love it!
You did a wonderful job here. Thank you so much for entering, and good luck in the contest, though I doubt you'll need it
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aww this poem is sooo cute! And sweet too!
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Awesome!
one of the best love poems I ever read! Just straight out with it, no meter nonsense that leaves the meaning behind. Good job! I like it! Keep it up!
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Actually there was rhyme to this...
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This is an absolutely beautiful piece full of emotion and sincerity it really touched me thank you for sharing!
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Its true, great poem and also i felt like b4 losing someone. Its fav "I’ve been going crazy with only the thought of you
I realize now there were some things I shouldn’t have said
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Hmmmm.....
This one on the other hand was very good. It was more of my style, love and loss. I see that your a good poet in this style. I enjoyed. I didn't read it all, even though it was super short, because I wasn't captured by your words. I didn't feel it. I would add some better words, maybe some imagery, and change it up a bit to make it sound like the person telling this poem will die without the one she loved.
Make the person fall into a world of images of the one she loves. The pistures floating in her brain for all eternity. That will grab a readers attention. Maybe some tears or running or action, you know more verbs. -
There are so many things that i could say to this that love changes and people change loving another isn't hard to find. But then I'd be denying the way that I feel there are only a few people in this world who I have met who have that unyeilding love for someone who years later that smile that grace their lips and those butterflies that flutter in their stomach are the same as they were on the first date. So what I can say is that if you are living functioning then what will be will be. If it was meant to be the world will make it be. You must live your life but not go out of your way to make it happen... The poem as words always are express a kind hope that few people wish others to know. But know that there are many more then what you see. Everyone has had a feeling of this. Some heal... some don't but either way this poem is beautiful and expresses many hidden feelings that can and sometimes are denied.
~Dragonia~
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Three Words: “I love you.”
Oh again a sleepless night, as you’re on my mind,
Wishing this clock on I could turn back the time,
Because baby, I’m telling you the truth!
I’m going crazy, just from the thought of you.
Now, realizing, there’s some things I shouldn’t said,
But every last word was screaming in my head.
I love you, honey, and its makes me insane,
I can’t live a long time with this undying pain:
I miss your smiling face, sound of your sweet voice,
When you were in my arms I knew you’re my choice.
You only could see the burned-desire weight I’ve shed,
How many known restless nights I’ve spent awake in bed,
My undaunted love for you keeps me that way,
Although those three silent words I want to say.
“I love you”
Your sonnet from a man’s points of view!
I loved your write so much, I ‘ad to give your
Sonnet as gift to you, with eleven-syllable lines change.
Cordially: Idomok
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Two for two... Niceness! (Meanign I have read two and both kicked arse!)
I think everyone can relate to this, both a good and bad thing. I really didnt think to much about the pain the poem was speaking of, mainly because its of one that is known to well by all. 8 out of 10, great job!
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Beautiful write dear I loved it and I would count myself lucky to have someone say this to me. You have outdone yourself with this wonderfully beautiful write the words the emotion the flow and rythm all perfect. I love it.
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oh my gosh! this is so what anyone in their right mind would want to hear. the emotion in this almost made me cry. wornderfully well done. viyanna rosemarie
ps--i hope you say the words to the person.
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"Because, baby, I have to tell you the truth
I’ve been going crazy with only the thought of you"
i love thissss<3
and I love you.
moreness.
♥♥
[then anna
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Walking the clouds!!
Recognition, belonging = intimacies of life.. Baby, there is no cage for the soul.. Honey, the Light flows from me to you. Indissoluble hearts and destinies. I Love You!! This line: "Because, baby, I have to tell you the truth I’ve been going crazy with only the thought of you" - beautiful disclosure!! This line: "Three silent words... I love you" - our secret signature.. xx
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I love this far more than any other I've read by anyone else, partially because I'm feeling the same thing right now. This is a beautiful piece, it made me cry but I loved it, keep it up!
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awww, so very sweet Kj. I loved it. Your getting to be a softy lol
heeee
you! SOFTY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! spelled with a bite my lame ass!!
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aww...hey sweetie? the person this is for is extremely lucky, to have your love...*smiles* Im here for ya babe...kay?
Love,
Kels -
Wow. Your getting alot of Wow's but hey you deserve them. This is an amazing poem. It flowed perfectly...but it makes me curious as to who this person is... But thats just me wanting to know everything
so i will stop. But I know the feeling of heart break...its horrible. But im glad you got a great poem out of it. Wonderful job. 
Great job
Love you lots
Punky -
Omg
... wow... Thats the perfect poem. Something I think about every day, every night, and every thought inbetween. I love this its just - wow! great job -bryan
P.s.
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Wow!
This is a great write!
To me it sounds almost like a rap.
The rhythm (sp?) has that kind of flow of a rap.
I thought that was cool.
Beautiful poem!
I really liked it!
Thanks for sharing!
You did a wonderful job!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
~ The Rocker who lost all aka Sacred Shadows
p.s. Be sure to check out some of my work
when you get the time!
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good work
the rhyming feels a bit forced, though
i actually enjoyed the cliche and thought it was intentional so dont change that
although it DOES feel like a news report versus the outcries of a deprived soul
"t’s my undying love for you that keeps me this way
And it’s those three silent words I want you to say
I love you"-- interesting ending, i wonder why the words are silent, thats the best part
nice job
--rin -
Lovely piece!
A beautifully sentimental piece! I enjoyed reading it. I thank you for sharing!!
Shannon
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Mixed
This needs a lot of work. It is too clicheed, lacks in metaphor, emotion and rhythm. I suggest trying prose. -
this captures the reader, and i believe everyone can relate to this piece-i sure can . this was an amazing write, you have a gift. keep up the great work!
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I very much like this.
The flow is nice and the rhymes work very well. =)
As I first started reading it I was thinking to myself "Wow, this sounds like it should be a song".
"It’s my undying love for you that keeps me this way
And it’s those three silent words I want you to say
I love you"
Those three lines are my favorites.
It's a perfect ending. =)
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Nice romantic piece - very lyrical. I think this could be good set to music - something soft and acoustic perhaps. Good work!
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Awesome job! I wish i had someone saying that to me!!!! Good job. -
You really touched me! Brought tears to my eyes. As one who has experienced heartbreak, I can relate (as many can). You have articulated the emotion very well. Great job!
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Wow. Just wow. I love this poem. You have a really good flow to it. I can also just feel all these emotions. How love can make you sick, yet you feel so a live.
"I realize now that there were some things I shouldn’t have said
But ever last word of it was screaming at me in my head"
I can say, that that as happened to me. Great job. -
I think your longing was very poignant in this piece. Ever should be every word though. Other than that this is a very good piece and one in which you clearly show the hurt and the pain one experiences when a relationship is ruined. Well done.
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Three words: Love. This. Poem.
It is amazing, and worth all the comments and applauses. It made me sad reading it, beacause there is so much yearning in it, yearning to be loved in return, yearning to have that person back in your life, and yet you don't know if they feel the same and it is sad.
Beautifully written, it flows so well and extremely romantic. It flows so well!
"If only you could see the many burning tears I’ve shed
And known how many restless nights I’ve spent awake in bed
It’s my undying love for you that keeps me this way"
these lines stick out for me, this is exactly what love is and how it makes people feel (well me at least) when you can't have the one thing you want so badly!
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It’s my undying love for you that keeps me this way
And it’s those three silent words I want you to say
I love you
that was awesome and I totally get this poem...I have the same issue... -
Very romantic and beautifully written!
I really enjoyed reading this piece.
Great work here and thanks for sharing this!
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very romantic absolutely a masterpiece of a lovers expression i must say if you ever wanted to propose someone witha heart to understand true love this one's it ...love is a wonderful experience to feel this world and its joys..courtesy pain...have a nice day....
life is beautiful
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Wow, you described your longing so well. I can totally relate (which I know a tonne and a half of people can with this type of poem, we've all been there). You've captured it so well, it made me want to cry. I almost did! Great job!!
Averill <3 -
This is why everyone should stop and think about what they say before it comes out to ruin a wonderful relationship. Because once spoken words can never be taken back no matter how much you want to. My advice is to copy this and give it the one causing your sleepless nights. Maybe then they will see just how sorry you are, and come back.
Wonderfully written, shows strong emotional depth. Really good job expressing it.
Cheryl
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aww i love this!!!!!!!!!!! amazing!!
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If only you could see the many burning tears I’ve shed
And known how many restless nights I’ve spent awake in bed
It’s my undying love for you that keeps me this way
And it’s those three silent words I want you to say
I love you
and I love you your poem Indeed.. it is so pretty and so passionate as well..great heartfelt work indeed...
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well done!
i car relate to this poem. nice job. it holds so much power and emotion, and it flows well. -(Dark Raven, the bard) -
well written
i hope that your loved one reads and believes the words in this very well written poem.this is a wonderful poem. -
I can feel the writhing struggle you express in your poem. I think you expressed the insanity very well.
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wow this is REALLY good. just wow.
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nicely done
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WOW..there is so much pain in this piece. I hope that you are able to get another chance. Great job.
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breath taking brought tears to my eyes
I love it so much for thats the way i feel my love is far away and pray to god he will come back safe to me. For I long to see him again your poem gives me hope and encouagement to keep his love in my heart -
oHHH!!! I LOVE THIS!!!!! I really like the feeling and just..wow..hun this is really really good! I know what oyu mean about finding tha t right person adn hpw you feel safe around them and all that..I had that once..to bad the guy didn't tell em the truth...but that's unrequited love for ya. Really good job though hun! really good job
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