Emotions running through my head,
as if it was just an ordinary thought.
He stays in my mind, never leaving my head.
Do I miss him, do I care?
What do I do?
He's sweet, he's gentle, he makes me feel
wanted. But what if it's all for show?
and there's no one else,
to help me close the curtains.
He's eyes show no emotions, and yet the emotions
are all mixed into one. It's as if he wants me to be
lost in the sea of what I'm afraid of..Love
These thoughts haunt my head as if there wasn't
another thought in state and mind.
Please make these thoughts go away,
I don't wanna care, and I don't wanna miss him.
But Maybe it's too late.
Author notes
This poem friggen sucks ass. I came up with it when I was talking with my friend. Please don't be fake and tell me this is a good poem, when it's not. Just put Keep or Delete, Thanks
Written August 14th, 2006
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This wasnt bad. Some of the lines were really good. 'do i miss him, do i care?' and 'its as if he wants to be to lost in the sea of what im afraid of..Love'
And the ending was really good. I liked the point of this poem... But i think the way you wrote it could have been better. Like.. I dnno i didnt find all the words effect me... But keep the poem and try to edit it.
Love you
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keep. lol. it wasn't bad. >_< even though you said not to say that. i really liked it actually. one suggestion though "HE'S eyes show no emotions" should be "HIS eyes show no emotions" but anyways,i liked the poem a lot. no matter what your author's comments box might say! haha. keep up the good work darling.
*autumn*
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