Changes in my body.
Changes in my mind,
seems to overpower my
everyday existence
Situations changing day to day.
Nothing remaining balanced or secure
Fear grabbing a hold of me,
shaking me to my core.
Its heavy hand holding me down,
not letting me move
Thoughts whirl around in my head.
My past, my present, my future
becoming entwined, making it hard to
tell them apart
Am I where I should be?
Should I be where I am?
Life takes me in many directions,
showing me many roads to walk.
My eagerness has me wanting everything
ready for the new, learning from the past.
Feeling the breeze brush through my hair,
the sun kissing my skin,
I stand on the threshold of my life.
I am one with the Universe
going from nowhere to now here
I honor and embrace my existence.
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Written August 14th, 2006
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Hmmmm...I like 'self-reflection' writes. This is good. Thoughtful and thoughtout. You have some good word-play going on in this piece. These are my favorite lines: "Am I where I should be?
Should I be where I am?"
I also really like these lines: "I stand on the threshold of my life.
I am one with the Universe
going from nowhere to now here..." This poem has depth and has made me think...well done poetess.
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This is wonderfully divine my friend.
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I really liked this =) Though as in many other poems in my contest, I don't see any great connection with fate or causality. But it's still a pretty cool poem! Thanks for entering,
xXx
Marieke -
Yes as we all should, to embrace our lives and existance and the blessings that lie with this gift of breathing. LOved this piece of poetry from you speaks in som nay ways to me, what a poets voice you have
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Wow, I really like the ending of this poem. So many times you hear people say what they would chage about their lives or themselves, and you did the opposite here. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!
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WONDERFUL DONE
These is wonderfully written also i like the flow of your words. I you dont mind I would like to book mark a few of your writes they are wonderful Lisa -
Beautiful poem
Again, this is a beautifully written piece. Full of hope. To be at peace with yourself is to be at peace with the world. I enjoyed this poem. -
WOW!!! This was absolutely beautiful! i like how the poem changes from the beg. to the end. It starts out where you don't know what you want from life or what life has to offer and then it ends so professionaly with you being at peace with yourself and life. I can really relate to this, maybe that's why I like it so much. This poem could bring hope to those who need it! Keep writing!
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I feel as we get older we look at life differently. I am still the little girl that I once was, yet I am me now and think about what life has on its menu. To think and be confused about it all sometimes takes over and becomes hard to deal with. But to be one with the universe is a nice feeling of calmness. I like your poem very much, Leaves much to ponder.
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as i read this i thought you were me as people in this land of humans we all go through stages in our life and in the realm of spirituality when we go from one stage to another we all go through stages of abandonment and other things and then get back onto the right road have no fear keep doing well
love the papa -
Feelingthe wind brush through my heair and the sun kiss my skin was taking by someone's else maybe u forgot but the words were true.
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wow this poem sure held a strong message
ive wondered these same thoughts before in my life
at times i still do
guess we all have asked this of ourselves before
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So much this poem wants to set a limit yet in the end thats not right at all only its ability to acknowledge freedoms I respect that and enjoyed sharing this one with you-write on.
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Souldful, I think you really captured the title of this piece very well. Speaking in general and if I can be so bold and assuming, maybe in your own life. good write image and visions
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Such is life. We all share the journey, yes?
It sounds like you've grabbed the bull by the horns. Good for you.
"I honor and embrace my existence." -And we all should no matter what. This last line is excellent. No, despair yet, full of hope and confidence, grace from God.
Truth spoken well. Thanks for sharing,
~Mary O
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lovely
Have felt these same things and you present them beautifully.
I think part of being a woman is uncertainty. Very touching and well done!
hugs Wolfie -
awesome
This is an amazing write. Well done. I love how it moves so nicely. Existance is always a funny thing I think. -
You give me hope. I have found someone - who dreams and lives - like me!
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As always...you have not disappointed me here... great job!
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I like this. It's very deep. It really goes with what you said on your author page about always embracing your day-to-day evolutions. I admire that. I'm gald that you seem so confident in who you are and how you write. That's so very important and so few people, especially women, have that now-a-days. Thanks so much for sharing. I really enjoyed this.
<3 Averill
PS Thanks for commenting on my poem! I love to return the favour
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very powerful write enjoyed this read I can relate so much to it you words are well written and full of hope I see great job...
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"Thoughts whirl around in my head.
My past, my present, my future
becoming entwined, making it hard to
tell them apart.
Am I where I should be?
Should I be where I am?"
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I stand on the threshold of my life.
I am one with the Universe
going from nowhere to now here
I honor and embrace my existence."
This is such an empowering poem.
We all go through moments of doubt and fear, and sometimes we managed to get over them and some other times they take hold of us.
It is amazing to see you "embracing your existence.
Great job.
~Hana~
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I like this poem I have felt this way many times and to stand out in the night air and feel the breeze lifts my spirits like nothing else can
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Very Well Written!
A very well written well expressed piece of poetry. I too often ask myself why I am here and if I am headed in the right direction. Your words flow well and the story you tell is one many can relate to!! Thanks for sharing
Shannon -
Hmm. I thought that it was pretty good. I am always hesitant to comment on poems that don't ask for a critical comment, but I do think that you seem to have some talent, and that with more writing, you can continue to grow as a writer.
~Epsilina Elizabeth Eshilon~ -
Wonderful poem, and I've thought about my existence often, very nice to read about someone else thinking about theirs, well done
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Ah, such a great write. yes, there is a sense of trepidation and ecstacy to it all, isn't there? We get a taste of that higher plane and we want all of it at once.
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This beautiful poem brought tears to my eyes. It is so poignant!! Your choice of wording and phrasing is wonderful.
I especially love the last line!! Warm Regards...vivela -
a very nice write, thank you for sharing
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