Trapped
Trapped in this darkness
In this hole I have created
Not for myself
But for someone else
However
With my foolishness
And complete selfishness
I have fallen into my very own hole
Light
There appears to be only a little bit of light
Coming only from the moon
It keeps me sane
As I think of possible ways to get out of this hole
Climbing does me no good
I must wait for help to come my way
But who would help such a terrible person?
Sympathy
I do not expect people to feel sorry for me
I jumped in too quickly
Too eager to get the job done
Not taking my time
Or being careful
If no one ever rescues me
I will know then that I deserve this
I will wither away in my hole
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Written August 14th, 2006
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I disagree with what some people have said I think this is a very good poem and is well written.
Good work.
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Thank you very much Samuel!
~Lynn
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very good
Very well done, it makes me think of things I wish I would have done differently in my onw life like the "holes" i have dug for myself in my past. Keep up the good work I love to read your writes! -
I liked your poem. We all dig are own holes and have to find a way out in our lives at various times. But I wouldn't fear about never being able to get out because you write on this site we'll be able to pull you out and help whenever you need someone. Don't worry about cliches, we would all be liars if we said we haven't used some at one time or another. The main thing is to get your feeling out and that is what you have done with this piece. Thanks for Sharing and keep writing, we love reading your verses.
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Thanks for the wonderful criticism. I really truly appreciate it. I've been looking for it all my life
I agree with you completely though. This isn't something I'm too terribly proud of. However, it is what I thought of to write at the moment. Not everything people think of at the moment are good. But it does have potential to be something better 
But thanks again 
And I don't have time right now, but later I'll check out your work. Have a great day
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Well you see, the hole is meant for another girl. Definitely not for me. So you see, I was saying that this hole was dug for her, not for me...uh huh...lol...
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Nonsense. It is a good poem. I am wondering what inspired the title though?
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Althoug it paints a lovely picture, I can't help but remember the hundreds of other poems my friends wrote with the same clichés. The poem wasn't very well-written, but it served its purpose: to present a cliché in the same light it always had been. But it has potential.
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