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Your Beautiful Sin



last night
as you slept in my ancient bed
i could not help but to think
of how you have changed my life
and the joy in my world


laying there asleep
resting from the pleasure of our madness
still damp and soft and burning
a miracle in lines and curves
a wonder in soft textures


so precious you are
a beauty at rest.. still touching yourself
unknowly holding the place of my passion
falling farther away to be alone
in your own private dreams


as you sleep
i kiss you one last time
remember again.. how you loved me
carrying me away from my self
from my trials


wrapping me again


in your beautiful sin





LeeL




 

Author notes

Words for my amazing love

I am blessed to hold you so close

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  • Faithbound gold member
    February 26

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    To be in love with love is such a beautiful thing. The highs, the lows, the whole shabang. To give somebody yourself completely. So completely that you hold nothing back and risk it all. This is the love you write of and so few ever find. Well done as always my friend.

    • Endeavor gold member
      February 26
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      Hi Trina


      Thank you for seeing so far into my words
      Nice to have you read me

      Rick

  • ravensgift gold member
    December 12, 2007
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    This was sensual and done very tastefully. I loved it...

  • nothinghere silver member
    September 8, 2007

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    It is simple and elegant and really no one could ask more love more pure, uncomplicated and precious... you have some muse at work there hun....

    Karen


  • daisybee
    September 6, 2007

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    !!

    Wow, that you drum up such emotion from so few lines, and I think you pretty much described how every woman (or man?) secretly yearns to be loved. And treasured.

    Blissfully sinful. x

  • LaVitaNuova1300
    August 18, 2007

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    My goodness! What emotion! Slightly seductive, yet not tastlessly so as the vulgar do, and I love the first two lines, especially the phrase "ancient bed". Somehow, those words are music and powerful. I also was attracted by the very title, which is intriguing and musical too. And yes, the last two lines are perfect and musical too. Though I have never been so lucky as you, alas, to be in bed with a woman and look at her sleeping, I dream of it, and this speaks so powerfully to me and makes me want to cry.

    I must confess, one of the most touching moments in the film "Hannibal" was when Hannibal comes up to Clarice sleeping and simply touches her, and moves her hair. It shows the sensetivity of the "monster" he can be, and how he kills out of love and a desire for good. The beauty of your love sleeping. I love the emotion of this poem. It holds a lot to my romantic heart!

    Bravo!


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 18, 2007
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      Nuova


      A rather ornate and detailed comment

      The words you liked well are true
      my bed is over 200 years old
      Great place to think

      I appreate your senstivity to my writing
      It is always a need of a writer to be understood
      Thank you for your carefull reading

      Rick

  • suicideQueen
    August 8, 2007

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    absolutely beautiful
    the scene was well captured which meant i could imagine what was happening whilst i was reading which helped so much more, a very powerful poem, very elegant and i loved it

    • Endeavor gold member
      August 8, 2007
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      Queen


      This is the other side of sexuality
      the tenderness of love and great care
      They live together in our world as truth

      I hope you make a bond with this in your life

      Rick

      • LaVitaNuova1300
        August 18, 2007
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        Yes, to this I must say somthing. I feel like Edgar Alan Poe in his poem Alone, in which he confesses to feeling different than everyone else, seeing in his unique way. It seems, especially in our post-Freudian society, most people take pleasure in the bodily pleasures of intercourse, but to me, a sensetive soul, I am enticed by the more tender and emotional aspect. In fact, when I sigh in passion, it is to the think of the sweet embraces of love. Oh what a godly soul you are, and I promise to buy your book, fellow servant of Love.

  • spine
    August 5, 2007

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    This is beautiful. I think this kind of shows the love we all strive to have, although I can only speak for myself. Delicious piece, marvelous.

    • Endeavor gold member
      August 5, 2007
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      Misery


      Thank you for your close reading of my words

      I read you, there is a gift there

      Rick

  • moon2u silver member
    July 29, 2007

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    So soft and sensual

    a beauty at rest.. still touching yourself
    unknowly holding the place of my passion...

    This line is pure magic...this is a feminine gesture that few men would even take notice of.
    moon2u


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 29, 2007
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      Moon2u


      I know these words
      because I know you as you are

      There are few things in life
      more beautiful, than a woman sleeping

      Thank you for looking in

      Rick
  • bergettigirl
    July 25, 2007

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    Love is something ver special. in this poem you pull the love out of your heart and let it show ass you wrote this poem. Great job


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 26, 2007
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      Morning Girl


      This is also from life
      Not to be confused with idel words for lust

      I almost could have not loved this woman more
      She was like an onion to me, I was doomed

      Rick

  • Jalalbad gold member
    July 25, 2007
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    you write

    about passion as if you are in love with love.
    smile,
    Judy


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 26, 2007
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      Judy


      You see well into my verse

      I am in love with the thought of love
      yet my words are always directed

      I thank you

      Rick

  • azlyn gold member
    June 30, 2007

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    This is a dreamy write, so sensual and full of a pure and consuming love. Certainly takes the reader away from the present and to a place of complete satisfaction. Lovely indeed.
    Blessings,
    Azlyn


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 30, 2007
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      Azlyn


      Thank you for caring for my words

      I am aware of the love you speak of in your own verses, therefore, it showes in my pages as well

      Thank you for reading me

      Rick

  • Dragons Lady
    June 29, 2007

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    Sensual and beautiful. So gentle and soft. The words flow with such ease like a gentle embrace. A magnificent poem. *Just realized I had already commented on this one, sorry.

    • Endeavor gold member
      June 29, 2007
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      Shadow


      Thank you for reading again

      I consider that to be a great complement

      Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    June 26, 2007
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    Hi Pozo


    I just saw your comment

    Thank you for caring for my writing

    Rick
  • Bob Fox
    June 26, 2007

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    what can one say

    even I, as a man must admit that your words are wondrous. Ladies flock to the tenderness and passion. well done. perhaps only a true poet could pen such lines


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 26, 2007
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      Bob Fox


      I have a brother on here named Bob
      He is am ER Docter and good

      Thank you for the great comment
      I appreate you

      Rick
  • pozo
    June 16, 2007

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    This is a beautiful poem with good use of description. I liked the sensual nature of this piece.
    Pozo


  • Unheard Butterfly
    June 14, 2007

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    KIND

    I love how this poem is soft,
    Gental & Kind,
    It's beautiful...
    All of your write is...
    & for you to not repeatly
    use the same texture...
    It's amazing...
    In every way...

    ~Breanna


  • Dragons Lady
    June 13, 2007
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    Well that one left me nearly speechless. (Not often that happens) This is yet another brilliantly penned work of art. The way you describe this women is absolutely wonderful. This is so erotic and sensual in a tenderly romantic sense. Well Done.


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 13, 2007
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      Shadow


      As a writer, if you were speachless, I may have done my work well. I want the reader to be in the moment with me, feeling it all.

      I thank you for your kind words

      Rick
  • Sam Is I
    April 23, 2007

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    Do you love someone maybe a wife? If so you have a powerful conncection with love. i can feel it with you writting. I hope to find someone with as much passion as you.

    • Endeavor gold member
      June 13, 2007
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      Winter


      I was loving someones wife and stopped
      Passion and attraction know nothing of paperwork. I fell too far

      Thank you for your lovely words to me

      Rick

  • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
    April 14, 2007

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    wow

    such a beautifully written piece your depth of passion in this write is incredible..
    Thank you so much for sharing..

    Peace

    ~M~


    • Endeavor gold member
      April 14, 2007
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      Dear ~M~

      Thank you for your close reading of this

      Like these words to me

      "your depth of passion in this write is incredible"..

      Rick




  • tiffydawn08
    April 12, 2007

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    Wow

    I know this is an older poem but in all honesty I think that this is an amazing poem and I think you are an amazing writer Kudos


    • Endeavor gold member
      April 12, 2007
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      Tiffy

      I made these words for a woman that is lost to me
      I almost can not read them without feeling anguish

      We should all love so deeply at least once in our lives, even if it is lost completely from us

      Thank you for feeling my thoughts

      Rick

  • panegyric ink
    March 25, 2007
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    i have to plainly agree.... deep perfection!!! Rick, you my friend are a true master of poetry. hands down. you have everyone beat!!!!!! any one of your pieces of poetry can stack up to others entire collections!!!!!

    God Bless You. -bri


    • Endeavor gold member
      April 12, 2007
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      Hi Girl

      How did I ever miss your wonderfull comment

      Thank you for feeling this way
      I was driven by a compelling love

      Rick

  • ennovy silver member
    March 22, 2007

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    Perfection my Friend

    words of elequent desire caress by sweet imagery. While reading this very arousing prose I ponder the beauty of two becoming one, then exploding into a earth shaking orgasm. You have a way will words, that
    touches the hearts of ladies, so clean, and honey sweet. The artist, a rare find, pure excellence.
    The read give one a warm feeling...........novy


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 23, 2007
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      Novy

      Thank you for reading this

      I am humbled by your kind comment

      I thank you

      Rick

  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    March 5, 2007

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    loving

    Very loving and passionate... I imagine what it must be like for you to know your woman loved your sexual passion so much she touches herself in that same place.. remembering.. reliving the moment... as a big strong ardent thrust moved inside of her.. and brought her to the brink of orgasm.. before exploding in a sea of white heat...


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 5, 2007
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      Angel

      I like you enthusam for the words

      She was a great partner, we did better in bed than standing

      She is gone now, I still think of her sometimes

      Thank you for your sensual thoughts

      Rick

  • mypassion
    January 21, 2007
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    sigh

    indeed quite imaginable..Comforting and soothing before some lays to rest..


  • vindicativevisage
    January 6, 2007

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    What do I think?

    I'll tell you what I think...this was great. Very sexy, man. I would guess that this woman (Gail, you said) is your Helen...and hers is the face that would launch a thousand ships. I was actually thinking about Helen of Troy as I read this, to be honest, and I was washed away in your passion, your choice in words--delicate and sensual--and the flow of it as well. Keep up the good work.

    I loved it!

    • Endeavor gold member
      March 23, 2007
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      Sweet 21

      I am sorry, somehow I missed your comment

      I appreate your words to me on this writing. How did you know of Gail? I removed her name after we broke

      I thank you for reading this

      Rick

  • Tabitha-Robin
    December 5, 2006
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    Passionate

    I love this poem. It is filled with such passion and love. I enjoyed this. My husband says the same words as this. But I am asleep, I don't know. lol... Keep writing. I love reading. Great work. Excellent.

    Tabitha


    • Endeavor gold member
      December 5, 2006
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      Tabith

      If you husband speake to you as this

      You are a blessed woman

      All is well in love

      Rick

  • Rose of Ireland gold member
    November 17, 2006
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    Very Sinful!

    This poem is very well written!! I think you should preserve it for all time... and I hope the special lady appreciates your beautifully moving and sensuous poem for her!!


  • BlessedAngel
    October 7, 2006
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    WOW! Such beautiful passion! Your pen is pure magic! Smiles, T

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 16, 2006
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    Janet,

    thank you for your rhyming words
    and praise about my thoughts in verse

    Rick

  • Iohagh
    August 16, 2006
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    Darling en...

    Your tone and stance
    find a gentle balance
    as sins like grins
    cannot be contained within.

    Yet analyzing your joy
    seems here somewhat coy
    so I commend this
    celebration of your bliss.

    Smoosh

    Janet

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 15, 2006
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    Thank you Blondone, I wonder if it is relized, how the words press upon me, as the author, Rick
    Edited on Aug 15, 2:17 p.m. because 'spelling again'.

  • blondone silver member
    August 15, 2006
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    very soft and sexy .... I believe this to be a very classy write all the right emotions inlayed into this write, the beauty you write about is heartfelt to me....

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 15, 2006
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    I never write Hard erotica, I prefure to imply the thought.
    Thank you so much for reading my writing, Rick

  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 15, 2006
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    Very nicely written, if it's just for practice, what th eheck can you do when you're serious. My only personal draw back is the sin part, I can never picture sex between consenting adults as sinful. I'm sure others won't agree, our society you know. I'm reading erotic poetry to learn. Will be writing some soon. This is a really good one to read.

    Thanks for sharing,
    Pure Thought

  • Night Hope gold member
    August 15, 2006
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    Yeahhh, but I've been here for over 2 years; you just joined in April... As for "sensitive men", I'd like to choke the idiot that told all y'all that "real men don't cry or show emotion"; I've always thought that's one reason you get ulcers & heart attacks...Ya gotta vent whatever is eatin' at ya...good & bad alike....ever seen a pressure cooker explode??? I have...it ain't pretty...I don't mind if a man weeps...just as long as he doesn't make a habit outta it... Who really cares what "society" thinks, anyway??? They all do whatever they're gonna do, while looking down their noses at everyone else for doin' the same thing... Wanda

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 15, 2006
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    That is an amazing number of reads 9,704. I just passed 1,000 today. On your comment, you said it all. I am the almost exstink senstive man, but I was this way before it was socially popular...lol

    Rick

  • Night Hope gold member
    August 15, 2006
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    Welllll, I have 9,704 comments, Poet...What about that??? Just kiddin' ya, Rick...I understand what you mean...Before my late Sweetheart, I'd lived alone for years & it didn't really bother me...Now that I know what I'm missing...sighhh...Here's to you & me finding what we seek...Poets are nurturing Souls, but we must have someone to nurture...& to be nurtured, in return...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Thank you for your comment, which I look foward to, and your special friendship. Again you see the clear point of the verse.
    Not the act, but the aftermath of the closeness. The Care, Rick

  • August 14, 2006
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    a gorgeous poem~
    breathtaking imagery of an intimate encounter rich in sensuality with all senses felt.
    the lines:

    "as you sleep
    i kiss you one last time..remembering again
    carrying away from myself
    my trials"

    "wrapping me again
    in your beatiful sin"

    is so beautiful as to watch the one you love after entwining as one is a most sacred and special moment that beautiful memories are made of which last eternally.
    ~simply gorgeous~
    lynn

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Again I have to say, I can bearly take credit for the words, they are comming to me without thought. Just falling on me.
    I am just fixing the words and the spelling, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    I made the changes Trista. Have I said today I am missing you.
    Thank you for being my loyal reader and caring for my words as I make them. Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Thank you sp much Hana. I just read one of yours and left a record comment from me on words of love. I am working on a new insperation and finding words I never knew to say, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Melodies, I always love your comments, thank you so much, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Inspired to me is a great word, I thank you, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Thank you for reading, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    I love the hours part of your comment, is it possable you are projecting..lol You write some very powerfull words. Thank you for liking mine, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Thank you Robert, and I understand well, the priority for the honeymoon. Enjoy love. Your Brother Rick.

    PS: Put in a good word for me and get a comment from your Bride

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Thank you Scarlet O for reading and liking my writing, Rick

  • John Timothy Bailer
    August 14, 2006
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    Hey! i really thought the imagery in this poem was completely awsome. i particularly love this part, so precious you are
    a beauty at rest.. still touching yourself
    unknowly holding the place of my passion
    falling farther away to be alone
    in your own private dreams

    Any way... thanks so much for sharing this. keep up the awesome work. tim aka childofthenight

  • MY lips will deny
    August 14, 2006
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    sensually beautiful

    this is truly a beautiful write. most definitely.
    thank you for letting me read this rick beautiful display
    of a passionate memory of your woman in your bed as you
    spent hours making love and remembering some of the sensual
    moments at that time. great job.

  • rlmcmd gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Rick,
    A really great, sensual write. Can't stay too long, just stopped by to show some brotherly love. Well, now back to the Honnymoon.
    Bob

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Thank you Solus. By the way, I like your name

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Jeannie, thank you for the WoW, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    I am honered to have a person with 3910 comments read my work, Rick

  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Wow! This is beautiful, sensual, loving, just incredible. Wonderfully written. Great job. Thank you for sharing. Jeannie D Hunter

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Maria, my intentions were as the words display themselves, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    I could watch a beautifull woman do anything for hours if allowed...lol..Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Arzab, Love your comment, Thank you Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Epsilina, Thank you for reading, You are very kind, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    A wonderfull complement, Thank you, Rick

  • Epsilina
    August 14, 2006
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    I thought that was cool. And interesting. I normally read stuff durring it, not after it, which was a cool difference. I thought that it was pretty good. Beautiful.
    ~Epsilina Elizabeth Eshilon~

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Thank you Luvd, as i was writing this, i debated on including that part also, but it is so human to do so, it seemed to reinforce the the tendrness of the moment before. Thank you for reading my words, Rick
  • Dark The Poet gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Well done

    Romeo said"...give him his sin again...", after kissing Juliet's lips, or was it her hands,Doesn't matter. The pure and generious sin I read in this poem put me in mind of the work as it is a work of art as well. You paint a beautful image of an act of erotica.
    Much Love

  • captaincrazy
    August 14, 2006
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    this is pretty good. I liked it.

  • poet2angels silver member
    August 14, 2006
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    Beautiful, Rick!
    You just seem to get better all the time with your lovely words, my friend!
    Great job!
    Lynda

  • Endeavor gold member
    August 14, 2006
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    Thank you ScratchedAt. I am with you in your thoughts. I never write filth, thou I admit to reading it...lol I would rather give away the thought and let the reader play upon the words from there own best experances. We all have had magic moments we cling to and return to in our mind. Thank you for feeling my words, Rick
  • luvdrkchocolate
    August 14, 2006
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    Oh my! What a poem that you have written in here. But I like it! This is the second erotic style piece I have run into in the last hour. Though it is very soft and light I did have to admit that I blushed when I got to the part about her touching herself (himself?). I think that it is romantic though. And it speaks of someone that has known lots of strife in their life and has fell into the wonder of a great love. That's always a great thing to read about. I think that you have done a good job of expressing