Float or drown
The relief of patience
Anticipation
To see you go down
And I'll swell up
When I am weak
"Punishment" you've given me
For all the wrong you've done
No hesitation
I'm getting impatient
No hesitation
I'm getting impatient
To take away the enemy
Pay your life-time debts to me.
I'll forget
Your display of the warped mind
Break me into
What I left behind
Now beg for forgiveness
To all that you touch
You'll beg for forgiveness
To all that you'll touch.
Author notes
Written August 14th, 2006
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I like the poem it was nice more of an average poem, good luck -
Well I do like the repetition very much. Very nicely done with those stanzas and the wording throughout the poem. However, the flow needs to be worked on. I got hung up on about every line of the fifth stanza. But other than that, well done. Thanks for the entry.
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