Find the therapy in the critisism and lies
and solve your problems with the sharp side
of a dull blade
bleed untill your hearts content
and take no regrets when the suicides finished
another sad step toward the end
please dont
forgive me
dont try
and kill me
ill do it on my own just fine
suicide letters
written not read
crimson stains
silver blades
just seconds away
let me go
its all your fault
you wont find forgivness
just guilt
you caused it all
now do us a favor
and free fall with razorblades
free fall with razorblades
and kiss the sun goodbye
for get about goodnight
because the suicides finished
now go away go away and let
me rest in pieces
Author notes
i wrote this in the car on the way home from nc i just found it lol
Written August 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- Your vary best, and I mean the greaest poem you have ever written by Paladin Warrior.
300 points, ended August 19, 2006, 12 entries
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I love the last stanza, it completes the peice well and just seems to flow
thankyyou for enteirn and best of luck
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fuck, kid. this is sweet.
you need to write some new poems. you're amazing.
looove ya. ♥ -
powerful write
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a-fucking-mazing
...wow. ok so.. we are sooooo gonna make this a song... like it or not. this is soooo fucking amazing!!!!!!! -
if I didn't know you too well, this would scare the crap out of me. but I love it... especially the first 2 and last 2 lines. pretty amazing, especially for someone who doesn't usually write about suicide. can't wait to hear it as a song.
<3
grand theft autumn -
wow!! i don't think i have ever felt so much passion in this poem like anyothers... i swear as i was reading it my heart was jumping but that is just me i guess.... well yeah ttyl
~Amber~ -
invigorating
I completely agree with the comment above. -
stunning! intense! powerful!
this is so powerful partly because it perfectly emulates the random yet focused, chaotic yet controlled mind of someone who is really suicidal. it seems as if you have been here before you know? i can just feel it's intensity, and tho it seems so sad, i feel as if the speaker is being let free, and that somewhat settles me. my first opinion of this when i clicked on the title was that it was subtly morbid but powerfully expressive and original, it isn't your average suicidal, love poem, its very unique and i really can relate. its a stunning piece which deserves recognition and credit, so i must applaud you!
free fall with razorblades
and kiss the sun goodbye
Just wanted to tell you also that i adore those lines!
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