There once was a dream of mine
In the darkness of my sleeping state of mind
I heard a voice that was inviting and kind
A kindness with a motive I would soon find
But not before he caught a child in his glistening eye
Too late
Within this dream a blue eyed child,
Who shy and timid, was weary of this convincing smile
She hid away for quite a while
He looked on with eyes so wild
But no one noticed the trembling body of the child
Too late
He found her finally in my dream
Took her hand and led her to a place unseen
His voice so gentle before now sounded unclean
Through his mask his evil now gleamed
She tried to let out a scream
Too late
In this dream of mine
His hands commit an evil crime
And hit her where no one would find
He promised her that if their secret broken, she would surely die
She kept her promise until a time
Too late
In this nightmare, it's her innocence he takes
But it's my body that aches
I try to wake
While in this pain, my illusion breaks
I find my dreaming state was fake
Too late
Author notes
"Heaven's not a place that you go when you die, it's the moment in life when you actually feel alive"
Option 1
Written August 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- Dream Catchers II by Raven Tears.
300 points, ended August 21, 2006, 4 entries
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An intense meaningful piece. Sad though that you had to experience such a nightmare.
Perhaps you need to take more caution of your friends and family.
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This was an amazing poem...What a horrible nightmare...really good poem tho
This was very well written...keep up the writing your great!!
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The last stanza of this poem really packs a punch. WOW!
I am very pleased, impressed and just delightttted that I came to check out your work. Great job, poet.
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this dream.. it's so sad. i hope that writing about it helps you to leave the dream behind. and i hope something comes into your life to replace those dreams with different and better ones. nightmares can be so difficult to overcome.. and what's worse is that they can seem so real. i like the way you made it feel real to the reader.. as real as it is to you. i'm sorry that you dream about this and well.. ::hugs you tight:: i know that won't make it go away.. but i just felt like you needed it. great work with this poem and keep on writing.. you have great talent and would LOVE to see more..
craig -
It seems that the poet almost suffers this violation vicariously in her dreams. The trusting child goes with the corrupt adult and the abuse troubles not only the child but also the dreamer who presumably feels a sense of guilt in being helpless, unable to protect the child. camus
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Thank you drummerchick and speakingup. I am glad you enjoyed my poem.
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This would be a horrible occurance in real life...hopefully this never happened...I like your writting.
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A common thing to do while being abused-disassociate from the current situation. You did a great job retelling the untold story!!
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WOW...WOW..and WOW !!!
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Yes, this is a dream of mine. I have it often, just in different versions. Thank you for your comment.
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this was an interesting idea, did you actually have this dream?
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Wow, wonderfuly written. I didn't take my eyes off until the end! Good luck.
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Thank you for your comment and applaud, I am glad you liked it.
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An intense and discriptive piece.
I felt the fear and pain one felt through out this write.
Dreams can be so cruel.
I hope you have pleasant dreams hereafter.
Take care and goodluck in my contest. -
Fab!
Phew ! That was a ride! I felt the pain and the fear! Thankyou and keep writing!
Edited on Aug 14, 2:38 because ''.
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