Beautiful sphere up there in obscurity,
Shine your guiding love upon me,
So that I may find my way through eternity.
Author notes
Written August 13th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- ~~~Moon~~~ # 3 by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended August 13, 2006, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Beautifully penned. I love the serenity this brings
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Lovely imagery and certainly goes quite nicely with the photo. The guidance that we receive from above is astounding and you captured it well in just three very short lines. Well done! Thank you so much for entering the contest and best of luck.
Leance
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lovely little poem, thank you for entering
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Very spiritual piece, great jog
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Aha, good, so few words and such vital thought. The eternal path of guidance along the shining sphere wow a good thought. Thanks to share
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A loving thought of hope comes throught very claerly in this write. great job..
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Really nice work...you've done really well with such a difficult task. Three lines isn't much, and yet you've managed to express such a depth of feeling about this that many people struggle to express in three stanzas. Really nice imagery, and very good expression, well done :-)
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Good write. Sorry I'm so late reading it.
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Wow!! it leaves me wanting more. great write and thank you for sharing this piece. Hard to belive three lines could say so much!
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very interesting. very short, but very interesting. i like it. it seems to have a bit of finality to it.
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very good
This was very short and sweet, I enjoyed the read and congrats!Thank you very much for you comments on my work as well. Very sweet of you to take the time to read, I am flattered. -
Beautifully written piece of art.
I wish I was as descriptive as you are.
God's touch
Jeri -
excellent
Love the images that your words bring to me. Good luck in the
contest.
taleo
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excellent presentation
This is very beautiful three lines. I like the spirituality it contains, and the words you have used are great!
Best wishes for the contest!
Ethereal Melody 
Thanks for your lovely comment on my haiku.
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Excellant/Inspirational
Well done, a simple, heartfelt prayer to the goddess. Very nice indeed. -
Oh such lovely words you have expressed here. A very well deserved trophy. Congratulations!! Gaylene
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A yearning for hope, very well written, Congratulations on your winning entry!
blessings Sandi
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Beautiful job, congrats on your trophy!
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Congrats to all of the winners.
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lovely!
Dear TRWLA
That was splendid and full of longing and the feeling of longing to give you hope..lovely write! Thanks for entering and good luck to you...
~~~PREETI~~~
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