Come dance with me, or
paint awhile
and bring to me that
awesome smile;
With coloured reason
dusted grey,
it helps to break
the life long day;
Those tone true notes
and hidden rhyme...
a metronome that
beats with time;
As cloud advance and
then depart,
I wake up with a
sleepy start;
Fragmented visions
once so clear
now blurred with time...
simply disappears.
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Written August 12th, 2006
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Glad you enjoyed it, many thanks for your kind comments
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Thank you Rory (good irish name that
) glad you enjoyed it
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Thanks, I appreciate the comments
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You're welcome! thanks for the poem.
Anne -
AMAZING!
FUDGE! Man, I read poems like this one and i just wish that I would have written it, i love it soo sooo soo soo soo much. Yeah...it sure is amazing and its the best i think i have ever read in my whole entire life. be proud!!!!!!!!!! -
an interesting piece, flows and rhymes well...I like the first stanza in particular...overall, a very enjoyable read.
Rory -
I really like this poem. It is quite brilliant. My favorite part has to be:
"With coloured reason
dusted grey,
it helps to break
the life long day;
Those tone true notes
and hidden rhyme...
a metronome that
beats with time;"
Yes, this part was absolutely amazing to me. I love the imagery and the flow. I really liked this write thank you for sharing and keep up the good work!!
Soon to be queen, but now still the...
Nubian Princess
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Many thanks for your kindness
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You are very kind and your comments are greatly appreciated Merry part
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Thank you
Glad you enjoyed it
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Lovely, delightful poem. Lyrical and fun, with an unexpected ending.
Thanks,
Anne -
I absolutely loved this write, as I have all of your writes. It was creative, smooth, and flowed beautifully. You did a wonderful job. Merry Part and Blessed Be.
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Very nicely done. I liked the line come paint with me because it was suggestive of the title. Flow and rhyme were perfect which made easy to read.
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Glad you enjoyed it....many thanks
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amazing
What a beautiful and creative and vivid write. I just loved it. Excellent poem
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