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the man out of the oven

if you were not perfect
i could make you as such
with scissors spice and a cake pan
i would bake you right up
when you came out of the oven
smelling fresh again
I'd sprinkle you with sugar
for a sweetness I'll always love to lick.

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Written August 11th, 2006

A contest entry

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  • pozo
    August 11, 2006
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    This was fresh and very well written Keep writing, I liked the originality here- great freeverse Thanks for your comment and yes you're right it's from generation to generation
    All the best
    Pozo


  • Firequeen
    August 11, 2006
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    very creative.
    ty for entering
    best wishes in the contest