if..
i could have you near me
i would make a place
to keep you close
to love you
completely
and send away time
and close the world
around us... from us
and fade away the day
to dwell with you
alone
in the night
i would lay you down
and bring you near
to hold me close
within you
and give my self to you
with tender tears
for the joy
of having found you
and look
within your wondrous eyes
for the signs of love
i adore in you
in that moment
all will be known
and every dream we hold
will shine and sparkle
in your loving eyes
for your love
i promise my fidelity
i swear
my unending loyalty
and i will give my life to you
for all my life
and love you
completely
trusting you.. with my soul
with my dream
till time has all departed
LeeL
Author notes
Just wanted you to read this, the words are more true than ever
Written August 11th, 2006
What did you think
Comments
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Yes, this is most lovely. It does appear to flow effortlessly across the page. It's sheer beauty creates a lump in my throat, ah! sweet love...
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Hi Cia
That is a nice comment
I appreate you reading me
Thank you
Rick
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Rick,
you had added the link to this in a comment on one of my poems back in Nov.. I see I commented then, but just wanted you to know, I reread this and these words are magic in soul commanding love.
Michelle
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excellent
what a beautiful expression of committed true love and such a gift to make your love feel close when apart.
this reminds me of wedding vows, only better.
Michelle
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Lay me down
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Into the passions of a sweet, gentle kiss,
down where your sultry, softening whispers
turn into the memories of my longing bliss!
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Lay me down
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Into your secure, strong, knowing arms,
always ready to hold me honoringly tight,
turning on your splendid boyish charms!
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Lay me down
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into the calming, soothing of your soul,
always so open to love & full of laughter,
now making me simple & genuinely whole!
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Pick me up
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So high my heart feels your winds,
in a place my mind can roam free,
lay me down once again & it ends,
the dreams of never again to be.
By: Autumns Tears
Your words are so serene and magical! they bring new light to the hopeless romantic! Thanks so much for your voice and this is the reverb of the winds in .....Autumn -
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Autumn
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I missed this comment from you. I just stumbled over it.
The words you wrote would make a great colorabation or a wonderful verse in it`s self. You should publish this on your page. It is beyond beautiful as I read the words.
I thank you for your thoughts and insperation, Rick
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Joyce, The words were written before I ever knew you, but each word fits the love I have found in you. That is why you are my dream
Rick -
how in the hell do you do this everytime
i am going to run out of tears, please stop...
this is even more beautiful than the first time i read it.
i know it sure means more to me know, than it did before.
this is just about the most beautiful set of words ever written.
thanks for sharing with me.
love you joyce
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I ment to say, Thank you for reading and caring for my work in words, Rick
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Thank you for you kind comment. Any poem that says in the Authors Comments "I have nothing to say" was for the same woman.
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Rick, I have to say that you have proven to be not just a great writer of romance but also the what I call the "mushy" kind...They more beautiful than the love poems.. But I have noticed you really pour your heart into every thing you write. Thanks for letting me read you...Smiles, Terry
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well, here I am, squished at the bottom again
Rick, I have a lump in my throat. Nuff said.
Love,
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Amoureuse!
This is truly beautiful!! A poem full of breathing roses and sweets in every fold.. Gentleness of kisses and caresses.. A song of understanding, trust and respect. This line: "and send away time and close the world around us... from us" - True love sheltering souls!! This line: "for your love i promise my fidelity i swear my unending loyalty" - Ultimate poetry of the heart oufffffffff This line: "and i will give my life to you" - Exactly my daily thought!! True bond of love in all dimensions!!
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Sheltered
WOW!! My line of thought exactly.. The place of love in a relationship is sacred to our sense of happiness.. We remember how it became important.. and we care what happens to it. We protect from harm and we might even sing its praises to others.. and make sacrifices to ensure its survival.. So it becomes at the end a special relationship with a place of love.. your poetry includes all the above..
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This is new and from a new insperation. I thank you for seeing into my words so well. Rick
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Rick for me to choose a favorite of your pieces it would come down to the one you penned for me and my husband. For it flowed with truth that fits us to a t. Aside from that it would be this one. No matter how you rework it I always swim in the essence surrounding the words. Trina
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Thank you Blondone. Thank you for your words. I think I have had enough experance so far in life. Just so you know, The woman I wrote "MY Mary" for lasted 25 years and I knew her for 30+ , so I am not a buttely or a Bee...lol... But I do love the enity God made, called Woman.
Rick -
as always filled with soft and tender words you are the man when it comes to love poems just always so touching..... love to read you words...
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Mel, what an interesting question, one I think we all wonder about somtimes as we read others words. If you saw me, you would see the most ordinary man, not pritty like some. My excellance if it exsist, is most likely, in my mind and in my care. If you ever come close to the edge of life, close to loosing your life, and are blessed to step back again, the nearness will create a passion that will follow you for your remaining days. I have never lost my passion and use it in every aspect, of every endeavor.
Rick -
If you are loved, and living within the permiter of thease words, I envy you and your dream. Love is easy to find, caring love with depth, is like a 4caret stone, rare. Bless you and thank you for appreating my writing, Rick
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the truth, the realness, the open and honest passion for another, the loyalty, the want, the need, the wonder, the dream that becomes true...i cannot say enough about what you have captured here. truly amazing work...i am very fortunate that i know these words and i live them beyond the realm of sentiment and in a world where it has all become very real...thank you for writing...i wish you the best.
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So tenderly dear and loving, makes me wonder how it would be to be loved by thee! LOL... I am not for you, but some lucky lady must love you true!
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Hi Sunshine, I like saying that. Thank you for you many complements on my writing. It is so nice to have people and espacally you, like my words, Rick
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Sandy, thank you so much for feeling my words, I appreate you< Rick
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This was beautiful, brilliantly composed, and the words my goodness are amazing. You have said everything about love all in a short simple poem. I appreciate this write as well as you for sharing. Thank you for making me smile...
Sunshine -
VERY BEAUTIFUL POEM
Your poem is so beautiful. The words bring a tear as I read how wonderful love can be. Thank you for sharing your wonderful and heartfelt poetry. Sandy
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That sounds so exciting. You must be a wonderful speaker after five years. Yes I can imagine 5 years of hotel rooms could be very lonely. As for me, I will always dream. So nice to hear from you.Have a wonderful weekend. Becca
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Becca, the world greatly needs more Dreamers. For five years I was on the Speakers Tour. My talk was about just that subject.
The title was, "The Dream, The Struggel, The Victory" If it wasn`t for hotel rooms, I would probally still be turing. Thank you for reading my words so Loyaly, Rick -
VERY BEAUTIFUL
Rick, I must say you brought a big smile to me, as I read this and think of the guy I love. You are such a romantic writer.I love reading your poems. You are a dreamer like me. Becca
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Rose, thank you for your fine complement, You are sweet to the MAX, Rick
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Thank you Doug, glad you liked my writing, Rick
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Thank you so much Honey. I think you mean My AP Wife likes it.
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Awsome!
very good piece of work! many of us wish of the same thing that you write about especially the line "and send away time
and close the world around us... from us" many of us can relate to that and that we just want the night to stay and not have daylight come and seperate us. anywayz great poem! -doug-
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Heartache can bring out the best in a writer. Since reading your work, I've found it to only improve.
This was a beautiful and emotion piece. A pledge to love.
Good luck and God bless.
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Thank you Trina, I liked the origional too, I just updated it to an 06 model...lol
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Thank you for the comment. I am always trying to eliminate words. I do little to try to actually construct my writing, it is mostly what comes to me, from an emotion. I will read it several times more and think of what I can do differently. Sometimes it is realy hard for me to change them emotionally once they are made. Does that make sence???...lol Thank you once again, Rick
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Very sweet and lovely write. I absolutely love this. And your husband seems to love it also. Keep up the magnificant work.
You expressed yourself really well here. so sweet,
Sweetie!
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Oh this is even better than the original! I love it! You sing such sweetness of love...sigh. Rick you are a romancer for sure...Trina
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I liked this it was very beautiful. It was a little slow though. I'm sorry to say that but it's the truth. Maybe a little more metaphors would work it better. The feelings behind it though are quite enlighting and enchanting.
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Very well done
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Thank you Bob, I may be on a roll...lol Sorry I have to work this weekend. I will be off on the 26, sorry, Houses come first this time of the year, Rick
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Sgt B , Thank you for your comment. By the way, I was a Buck Sergent (E-5) in Vietnam 68-69
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Excellent
Rick,
Yes, this does belong in the book! It is very lovingly writen, with immagery abounding.
and send away time
and close the world
around us... from us
and fade away the day
to dwell with you
alone
in the night
i would lay you down
and bring you near
to hold me close
within you
Dazzeling mind candy, Bon Bons for lovers.
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Hi Di, I am praticing on Trista my New AP Wife. Thank you for the wonderfull complement. If you would would like to read from another romantic man. Try my Brother, Dr Bob rlmcmd . He is a great man and a great Docter, Rick
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Hi, you really are a romantic at heart, that is a pleasant thing to find in a man, a rare race as well ,lol, we need romantic poems full of declarations of love,I wonder who the lady is? no I will not delve too deeply my friend,very romantic, all the best, be happy, Di
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Im sure women would love this one. I do appreciate it though, good work nice flow
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Perhaps the excitement level would increase if you were a woman in love...lol Thank you for reading anyway, Rick
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Not a badly written poem. Just boring. I liked the title though. Very nice title.
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Just to make it easer for you, the origional version of this work is "Compleatly" I customized the words to match my thoughts of you more closely. How did I do??? Your Rick
allpoetry.com/poem/1990967/all=1
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My happly Married Wife, how sweet is that. If you want, I will recover the origional version so you can look if you are that currious. Anything to keep you happy. Love Ya, Rick
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Oh, husband mine...I loved this the first time, and naturally it is just as (if not more) beautiful the second time around. I often wish you would post both versions of your reworks so that I might compare them...hum...perhaps I will have to start printing them all out?
You are such a romantic at heart, and it shows in every word you write.
Your happily married AP wife,
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Victoria, thank you for reading and appreating my writing, Rick
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liked it the firsttime around. well penned full of emotion, love romance, as always you speak of you through your words. as this one says so well. anyhow. great job, beautiful piece.
blessings
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Thank you so much, Rick
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Rain, you are very perceptive. Sometimes IF, changes everything, Rick
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Joyce, Your comments mean so much to me. Thank you for being a loyal reader. I think you have the drife of my style, Rick
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Thank yoiu for liking my words so much, I am honered, Rick
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Dimitri, If, you connect with the words, I have said my thoughts well. Thank you for reading my work, Rick
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Rreally, really tender, superbly flawless with a soft rhythm and flow that could be compared to the gentle beating of a heart filled with true love. I like how your love devours and envelops you at the same time, how caught up you are in it, how much it satisfies and completes you that you are willing to shut out the whole world and surrender yourself to this person. Bravo...excellent, beautiful and heartfelt.
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Bravo!
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A wonderful love poem. It is also sad at the same time because it shows a longing...the first line "if" lets the reader know that it hasn't happened yet. It's beautiful. I enjoyed reading it
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intresting...
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OMG.......... how many times can one person say how much they love your beautiful, touching remarkable wonderful poetry.
your words simply take my breath away. i love these words.
" and give myself to you
with tender tears
for the joy
of having found you
and look
within your wondrous eyes
for the signs of love
i adore in you ".
I really love the whole poem so very, very much.
you take the most loving words and put them together and out comes this outstanding piece of poetry art.
thanks for sharing and never stop writing.
joyce
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This is absoultely incredibly beautiful. I write alot of love poems and this one brought tears to my eyes. Not for being sad but for sharing the love you feel. I just thought this was exceptional. Great work.
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Excellent
This poem you have written here has stirred such emotion within me. It is very well put across and I am so happy for you that you feel like that for another. I relate so well to it and connect on an extremely deep level.
Very well written.
Well Placed "If"... I got so lost in the poem that I forgot about it.
Dimitri
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This is a poem I have rewriten and hopefully improved. Glad you liked the words, Rick
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very romantic
awww, did u write this for me? just kidding. its pretty.
you must be back to your loving mood again, huh? how are you
feeling?
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Thank you Katie, love your comments, Rick
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Great write
Hi Rick
Another great poem written from the heart. Great imagery in this poem. Beautiful words of love to win the love in your life. I'll IM you on a correction. -
Lonely, Love your comment, Thank you, Rick
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Wow ... this has seriously left me speechless
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