A flicker of the eyes, a trigger in the mind.
A wondrous story begins to unwind.
A thrilling sensation, a powerful creation.
An alternative to this meaningless existence.
A subtle fantasy? A careful warning?
Or the incessant craving from a lonely beginning?
A beautiful place, of endless possibilities.
I dream of dreams of dreams that I dream.
Author notes
Option: (3)Dream ... today i went to work
Written August 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- My word is Your word by Legend.
300 points, ended August 15, 2006, 11 entries
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Okay, I liked the begining, but the last line was kinda weird for me.... Overall this was a good poem. Good, but not great in my opinion. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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Glad you liked its shortness and uniqueness
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting!
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beautiful
what a beautiful write...outstanding...smile..Dave -
A very sweet poem
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Short and unique.
Jim -
Oh, that last line is really something...it gives the poem layers to peel away to get to the bottom of the poem. Great job with this and good luck!
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i like that mystical feel i got while reading this, and i thought the length was perfect, short and sweet!
B&P -
Oh--to hide inside sweet dreams and leave reality for a while. A very beautiful and well penned piece of work. Good luck in the contest.
Shaz xx
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What an excellent conclusion! Without our dreams we'd be bored with nothing, spending time to at least dream of having them breaks the monotony for at least a little while
wonderfully scribed! Best wishes once again Sandi
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So true...dreams offer endless possibilities...and surprises. This expresses so much in just a few lines. Well done. ~ Sue
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Another very lovely poem, Best of luck in the contest. Sandy
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I do so love the final line of this most enjoyable read,that is not to detract from the rest of the work.It is just that many is the time that i myself have dreamed a dream within a dream ,and strangely knowing it was a dream Thank you for entering Good luck in the contest
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