Half way round the world.
Half way through space and time.
Half hearted of carelessness.
Half of me, all of you.
Whose arms will you rest in tonight?
Whose lips will yours gently caress?
Whose hands are stronger than mine?
Whose eyes will yours hold entwine?
All that jazz must come to an end.
All that was once now fallen apart.
All these feelings away with thee.
Loneliness doth love company.
After all said and done.
After all that's black, white, and grey.
After all has run its course.
I'm awake and you're still asleep.
Author notes
Loneliness
Written August 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- My word is Your word by Legend.
300 points, ended August 15, 2006, 11 entries
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This is beautifully penned, expressing the fears and sadness when separated from the ones we love, A lovely entry for the contest. Well done and good luck.
Shaz xx
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Interesting structure. A very good entry into the contest.
Jim -
Nicely done in describing lonliness and all those little fears, doubts, and questions that keep us up at night. Really loved this line:
"Whose hands are stronger than mine?"
It is such an unusual question, yet really brings home to the reader where the person in the poem is at. Best of luck in the contest, I really enjoyed reading this. -
'Loneliness doth love company'
^my favorite line
i think this has to be one of the best poems ive read on this subject, and i really like that in-depth way you write, cunningly beautiful
cheers
B&P -
I really liked the change in the last two stanzas breaking the symmatry from the lines before, it gives the illusion of answering one's own questions accepting (though grudgingly)reality. Very nicely done! Best wishes
blessings, Sandi -
Excellent write. Well done and good luck.
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This really speaks to the doubt and fear we all feel when separated from someone we love. That's when the imagination can sometimes can be detrimental to one's peace of mind. It seems to be human nature to always imagine the worst. Well done. I especially liked the last line. Good luck! ~ Sue
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A lovely poem, Best of luck in the contest. Sandy
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I think that you have captured the feels of despair of uncertain love so well Who has not lain awake wondering what ones absent love is doing.Wondering if they too are suffering the same feelings A beautiful poem Good luck in the contest
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