you give yourself these tears,
because, somehow, it makes you feel better
about the worthlessness you've grown into...
wasted away each day;
after day, after day...
you had so much going for you, too...
did you give up?
or are you really that apathetic?
are you comfortable
with being nothing, now?
I know you aren't...
you say so, every time
you stare at the mirror crying...
it's weird how you talk to yourself,
are you really that arrogant?
does it come natural with insanity?
I once thought you could be brilliant,
now, I don't know any longer...
you've lost touch with reality,
you've lost touch with everyone,
who once cared for you...
yet, you cry about how
you have no one...
did you purposely push life away,
so that you could have a guilt-free death?
or is this just another cry for attention
to an empty audience?
I wish you could push me away,
I no longer want to be
the mirror image that you see...
I don't want to be
part of your insanity...
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Written August 10th, 2006
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Wow I love your work so much!!!
It just seems so calculated and ...perfect!!
I love the way you describe things. To the point and easy to understand. I haven't been on here forever but I added you as a favourite a long time ago and I don't think I read this one.
I think I will read some newer work.
Thank you for saying things I can't
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it's weird how you talk to yourself,
are you really that arrogant?
does it come natural with insanity?
I once thought you could be brilliant,
now, I don't know any longer...
I loved this part! I enjoyed your poem!
~Dommi -
you express your anger in this work so well.You toud=ch on such a untalkable subect.I applaud you for showing the reality of the way of life some people deal with.You are standing up for what you now believe because of a horrible outcome.
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wow
This poem reminded me of so many different people. So many people nowadays waste their lives on this. For example:
"you've lost touch with reality,
you've lost touch with everyone,
who once cared for you...
yet, you cry about how
you have no one..."
This explains everything perfectly. I really loved this part, and I really hope that you keep writing. You're great at it.
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This is brilliant... I use to feel this way when I looked in the mirror but not anymore...I just don't allow it!! Now I look in the mirror every morning and tell myself that something about me is beautiful and great... Sometimes its something as simple as my ears... but that is all it takes for me now... I will simply pull my hair up and show off those ears that day!!! Great job on this piece!!!!
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I wish you could push me away,
I no longer want to be
the mirror image that you see...
I don't want to be
part of your insanity...
a great thought you have portrayed here, truly the balance of the life and its truth is revealed here..a very impressive work...it seems that there is a kind of internal travel amongst the words which are more expressive than the words leading and this makes this write a little different but at the same time very strong and very expressive as well..I
really appriciate this work here..
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very good write
so many struggle with what they think they see , however they are blinded what true beauty they behold. Yet in others they see it so clearly, sometimes I would think I wish I could look at myself as others see me, But in the end no matter what, I was still just me. Sigh a good write brings back old memories for me ,
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Wow. This almost made me cry, I think because it is something I (and seemingly everyone else here) can relate to. It's so beautifuly written too. Amazing write! Best one I've read in a long time!
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whoa
wow if i didnt know any better i could sware this was directed towards myself... amazing amazing poem... i know meny people could relate to this poem... weather it be the visionaries point of view or the recipients ... overall, outstanding effort... well done
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i can relate to this piece more than is comfortable. its wellwritten and openly honest about inner conflicts. man vs. self very much. amazingly put.
in ink, me
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Wow.. sounds like an inner me talking to the outside me... I like this one alot. I know that everyone feels like this at times. I've had my moments like this.. Thanks for sharing!! ~~be strong~~
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PROFOUND!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Wow!!!! I think I have that conversation with myself almost everyday!!!! This reasonates so well with my life you don't even know how much I relate to this!!! I could even see my own reflection looking back in the miror at me saying all these profound things you have stated here in this amazing piece!!! You have TALENT!!!! I almost didn't click but am I glad I did.Yu just gave me another kick in the butt to try and get out there and achieve some goals!!!Thanks for provoking this thought in me tonight!!!Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~
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I absulutely Loved this Piece........
so much emotion in your words.......
I love these type of poems!!!!!!!
how you make me feel as if i was actually there
in that moment........
Not many people can capture feelings
as well as you have in the poem.......
How every line flows nicely into the next......
so very sad that we all hate ourselves in one way or another....and no one sees the pain...
but us ... when we look into the mirror
great write!!!!!!!!!!!!
I cant wait to read more of your poems!!!!!!
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this is brilliant
"it's weird how you talk to yourself,
are you really that arrogant?
does it come natural with insanity?
I once thought you could be brilliant,
now, I don't know any longer..."
most of your poems really do read as if you were talking to yourself, i love that
and btw, we all talk to ourselves... it really isn't as weird as you may think, it doesn't exactly mean you are insane : ) (or well atleast i'd like to think i weren't insane)
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most of my poems are me talking to myself...
it's considered "insane" to do it out loud.... but as long as you do it on paper it's poetry, lol... -
"or is this just another cry for attention / to an empty audience?"
those two lines hit me hard. a very emotional piece with a bit of a surprise ending that made me re-read it. at first, i thought it was directed to someone else, but i was surprised when i read "I no longer want to be / the mirror image that you see..."
you did an awesome job, this one is very descriptive.
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