In a world darkness had me breathless
broken, alone, not a place to call home.
A mysterious light shined, and embraced
an angel of love took this imperfect soul.
Beyond the heavens happiness is exposed.
Chained to misery, losing all hope
My life swings on a brittle rope
On a carousel of broken dreams;
People never noticed my screams
Pain echoes through the air of misery
who would have thought that something
bright would become of you and me? My
life's source you are, my wish come true
beyond the stars. As we hold hands and
mend our scars, emotions no longer confined.
We set one another free
Two souls brought together as one
The dark and gloomy days are done
Stars shine brighter than ever before;
Two lovers, no longer alone anymore
Agony shall no longer prevail, on the
sea of love we will sail. I'll hold
your heart, cherish, accept it, for
the first time I will promise, and will
not fail. Tell me what else can I give?
My love you are the reason, I'll fight and live
Our love burns like a wildfire
You're my one and only desire
You're my light on the darkest days
You and I stand forever and always
My love for you will exist beyond death,
my dear you are my every breath. On bended
knee, in your eyes I look deep. In eachother's
arms eternally we'll sleep. Our promise will
remain solid, sacred divinity we will keep
Author notes
Collab with someone very special to me. Comment if you'd like to.
Me-Italics
MxA-Normal
Written August 10th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Your strength! by Cyanide Milkshake.
900 points, ended July 9, 2008, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Hmmmm!
Good collaboration it seem that you all are in harmony. Cool deal!
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Congratulations on teh gooold, this definitely deserved it!
These were my favorite lines:
"Chained to misery, losing all hope
My life swings on a brittle rope"
"My love for you will exist beyond death,
my dear you are my every breath. In eachother's
arms eternally we'll sleep."
Awesome yet guys! Love you 
Jeanette*~
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This is a beautiful collaboration. I have read so many that clashed. It would have been easy to muck it up with the drastically different styles of free verse and rhyme. Instead, they compliment each other very well.
Congratulations on the gold cup. It was well deserved.
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Ahh, beautifully phrased. Lovely gentle appeal in this.
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Love is hope and always believe the best and I believe this is a very wonderful romatic poem. Well done.
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Wow that was so exquiste, very lovely imagery, so full of love for one anoterh, great job.
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This was simply beautiful. The both of you did a great job on this piece. It was breathtaking. The love and warmth was flowing off of very word so peacefully.
sunshin love and flower kisses
always and forever,
~Kendal -
this is a very beautiful poem mommy. there is so much love in the words of this poem and it just shows how much you love her. amazing write, you have so much talent.
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Well, isn't this just beautiful. You two are so cute together and it's nice to see you two so happy. Love you both♥
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wow, this is excellent!!!!!!!! i very much enjoyed reading thi piece, you two should colab. more often. great work, ly, Duckie.
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Just Lovely!
This is indeed a sweet pleasure. Don't collaborations bring out such beauty among poets! Very nice reading. Carry on and take good care. Keep up the good work!
Tommy -
Wow powerful s.h.i.t right there! Man thats something I'd love to say to my boyfriend but dont have the words to. But you pulled those words right out of you like beads on a string! It was crazy! Great write I loved it!
Kuts & Kisses
~Madi~ -
I liked the parts in the italics. They had a nice beat and rhyme. But I felt that the line breaks in the other parts were odd and they disrupted the poem for me.
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DEEP!
AWESOME WRITING!
TWO SOULS BROUGHT TOGETHER AS ONE
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aww this is such a sweet poem. Full of love and hope and a great write from the both of you. You are both very talented authors and I enjoy reading all of your work and together you both made such a wonderful poem..You should defintly think of doing it again. Keep writting you are both so good at it and perfect for each other..I hope your love never dies....
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Aww. I loved this poem! This was absolutely beautiful. It reminded me of my hunny. You two did a wonderful job on this piece. I could feel the love flowing off the page.
The rythme and rhyme were excellent. I love how you describe the past and the present. How things are now since they are together. It's just like the relationship I'm in. I use to be depressed and lonely all the time and now I'm always happy and in love.
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awwwwwwwwwweesomee!!!!!!! i luved it very much. You have a talent to write so well y dun u go and publish this one. theres so much to feel in it, it has so many feelings attached..it made me feel as if you are really a strong and devoted lover. Every line had so much in it.. My love for you will exist beyond death it says the best thing eva!
God bless!
love,
Manny -
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww *deep breath* wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! Seriously you guys this poem was frrekin awesome and sweet beyond all reasonable belief. You guys should collab more often this piece was pure genius all the way without a doubt
I love the dark kinda morbid pure love thing it has going on everyone should have that whether it be with a friend and/or luver. Great job keep it up!! 
♥Jordanne♥
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