Well,I was standing there in the kitchen, I heard you coming up behind me. As you put your arms around me, I could smell your sweet scent. It filled me with such a loving feeling, As you gently kissed the back of my neck. I feel my inner passion of warmth starting to awaken. For with each kiss,it made it harder, For me to do what I was doing. As you lead me over to the table,I stood there And with one of your muscular arms, You lay me on table, plates and all went flying. And your kisses moved down my body. The fire growing within us, The passion of your kisses were getting so intense, That I longed for the sweetness of your Manhood To be deep inside of me. My mind raced with the wanting of you. You would only say “wait my sweet". Hold on just a little bit longer. Until you can hold it no longer. I could feel the motion of our bodies, As they moved together as if were in a dance. This dance of love that we were dancing, With the fire of passion growing even more intense. With each move of our bodies moving to and fro. Till there was an explosion within us both. And now after the dance of love, In our Kitchen which, Will never be just a kitchen any more, For now it was a place of loving you. (c) Rose Patrick April 10,2003 All Rights Reserved
Author notes
Written April 10th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Seduce Me by C.W. Bush.
500 points, ended June 6, 2005, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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ok not for me...lol
I would love to read the end of this but, I can't I know I tell you so much about my "sex life;" however, I can NOT read about yours..lol. I will tell you that from what I read, your grammar was so much better in this piece, congratulations!!! I am so proud of that.
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great love poem, enjoyed reading this very much. thanks 4 sharing
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wonderful... takes my breath away
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I can see where you are coming from here, I did feel the sexual tension in this poem. However, I did find the storyline and imagery slightly clichéd. You do a good job of communicating those feelings though.
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Id like to know just what else was on the menu cause after that I think appetites would be well and truly sated
Mia
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What a great way to kick off my twentieth contest! A good, hot piece of erotica. I liked the way the piece so effectively conveyed the sexuality, whilst still flowing like a quality piece of poetry.
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you freak... i love this. its like short eyes story, its gre8 and descriptive and real
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beautiful,you defently made this sweet and innocent,and at the same time you filled it with a hot passion of sex....an amazing write...you did a great job expressing a way to love someone
;P*hint hint,,wink wink*
Kaila -
wow i think I want a place like that. but my just has drity dishes. this was great love it
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Hi Rose!! Was feeling kind of dreamy and read this one again...Thanks - you are such a sweet blessing to all of us here:)
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This is pretty sweet in its own sexy way. lol.
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Wow Rose! This was very well done indeed! Very hot, steamy, and sensual, yet I could feel the love behind the passion. You’ve expressed yourself very well. It is very well written with a nice even flow to it. Thank you for sharing this one. I enjoyed it very much.
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SEXY
Hello Rose
WOW It got HOT in here!! This was wonderfully erotic and sensual. I could feel the rythm of the 'dance' I love it! Sex on the table! Great images in my mind now
Well written as always Rose. Thank you for sharing it with me, and thank you for your always lovely comments. / f/ f/ f
~Johnny -
Sensual, loving and steamy. A scene in
which two lovers would sit at the table
surrounded by company, and both would
look up and share a secret smile. Enigmatic
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Rose you captured kitchen love beautifully. This is one of the most beautiful and tasteful erotic writes I have seen here. Good job! Keep it up. Freeways Mom
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excellent
I think I will make something HOT in the kitchen tonight
Reenie
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Love in the kitchen...In the bathroom..In every room in the house..Makes it a home if you ask me! Good write!
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Thats great!!! Funny too - I have ALWAYS said that love starts in the KITCHEN and not the bedroom - just a few nibbles while dicing the carrots makes things a lot dicier!!! (& I dont mean the carrots anymore) great one- thanks...
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Very cute/ turning up the heat in the kitchen even when the oven isnt on. I think more than one of us have been there done that so to speak. So nice of you to capture the moment lol
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beautiful sensuality mixed with expression of love. .
amazing to think of how your daily life is changed forever in just one act.
cat -
Very Nice job. Well put together. Thank you so much for your kind words. Your Poetry friend
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Fill me with warmness from your kitchen - wonderful 5 minutes I spent here!
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Well get outta that kitchen and rattle those pots and pans
very nice... very nice indeed
Sizzle and stir fry!!!
~GILL~ -
How many times do we do this??? Do we tell our friends that this is the table of love...I think not. Great write...reinforce the legs on that table
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6/10
The 3rd stanza is missing a word and I didnt' care too much for the 'muscalur' stanza either. I like the beginning, it felt sensual but then you went away from the sensuality and made the piece into something else - may be porn, may be not.
To each their own I guess, I mean, I think it is better to stick to one than the other, but, that is me.
A nice piece here.
Edited on Apr 12, 11:23 p.m. because ''. -
Oh Yes, this is very yummy and sensual I agree, it's not just a kitchen anymore Oh yeah, smiley is right, the bathroom sink is very interesting!!!!
I will be reading more of you
Karen
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dear sweet heavens!!!!! you certainly captured the spitit of love here. and you are right, once there is love in a place, it is never the same. visions of love.... keep in mind. this was so well done, with just the hint of sweet erotic lust that left my heart pounding and my mind realing with so many memories.
arden -
I like the last phrases...Isn't it amazing how places take on different significances whenever we've shared body and soul there? A place of loving you. ...hmmm...that sends me to my album of memories...may pause on some pages for a while! *smile*
m -
Love in the Kitchen - very nice - those unexpected time are always the best I think - sensual - nice.
~Von~ -
I had to click on this when I saw it because I have a poem about the kitchen as well, LOL, it's titled Harmony.
This piece is... well, it is steamy and sweet. Really enjoyed it.
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a moment in the kitchen! always worth the pause in the daily humdrum routines to hold eachother, wherever you may be.
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Cooked
It is very sensual, using dance in there added to the quality. A few grammatical errors, but those can be fixed. All in all, this isn't my kind of poem. -
PENIS
PENIS -
I like the passion and spontaneity in this poem. It was very nice and refreshing. In one line..you need to add the word "do" it made it hard to DO what i was doing..I think you left a word out. Other than that it was great, and a very nice read. :-D peeling
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It would be easier to understand if you just touched up the grammatical errors. Also, at first your phrases weren't extremely original. They were good, but I've heard similar phrases so many times that I really wasn't feeling the moment. This got better later in the poem.
"I could feel the motion of our bodies,
As they moved together like as a dance. " I like this line!
Nice write. --onlyh
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very good, sensual poem here!
yes, a few gramatical errors, but all in all pretty good!
mike -
work in progress
Sweet sensual and passíonate. You sure paint a vivid image. However, you do need to read it again while paying attention to spelling and sentence structures. I wont waste space on pointing them all out, a program like Word or so would probably find most of them for you Over all, good first draft, just needs a bit of revising.
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don\'t touch it
A very wonderful piece of poetry, love making in the kitchen, awe!
Sounds Like you had eachother for desert, heehee!
Keep up the wonderful writes of love!
Thanks also for sharing, pen on!
~Timothy~ -
this was very sensual.. Next time try the bathroom sink... You'd be surprise at what can be done
Lovely piece it brought back found memories for me.
Yvonne
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For with each kiss, it made it harder,
For me to what I was doing.
there should be a DO in there... 'for me to DO what i was doing' although that seemed like a very clever line break. was it meant as a filthy joke or am i just corrupt
kitchen love. reminds me of a song. 'put me on the counter in the kitchen now baby..' it gets a tad explicit after that lol
My first read of your stuff. good write!
Jadey xXxXx
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For with each kiss, it made it harder,
For me to what I was doing.
there should be a DO in there... 'for me to DO what i was doing' although that seemed like a very clever line break. was it meant as a filthy joke or am i just corrupt
kitchen love. reminds me of a song. 'put me on the counter in the kitchen now baby..' it gets a tad explicit after that lol
My first read of your stuff. good write!
Jadey xXxXx
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very sexy.
very nice piece. it gives me ideas...hehehe! it was very well written aside from the grammar errors. very nice.
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This is a very sensual write. I think if you read it out loud you may catch some of your grammatical errors...just some suggestions:
Drop the 'Well' at the beginning or add 'As'
[quote]As you gentle kissed the back of my neck.
I felt the my inner warmth of starting to awaken. [/quote]
It should read more like this:
"As you gently kissed the back of my neck,
I felt my inner warmth starting to awaken."
You have a few lines that could be tightened up a bit...other than that...good job!
Gayla
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