WORDS-LOVE OR HATE
Words, echoing in the wind, fall on me.
Tenderly caressing my saddened soul,
they hold my heart with sweet emotion's care
and wash pain away with healing grace.
As new vocabulary comes to me,
expression of past events is possible.
Where a blank void in my mind existed,
a lit pathway appears before my steps.
All that threatened to destroy my being,
now is given a voice as silence goes.
The torment that created many tears
is being drowned by the freedom of speech.
Shuddering, I faintly hear evilness.
It lies in the back of my mind, haunting.
Demeaning names struggle for a fresh breath.
Promises of death eagerly await.
Yet, the new language I am learning grows.
Each day, each hour, each minute, it grows.
Fading is the language of hate I learned,
forcefully, unwillingly, painfully.
As I hear syllables of hope and love,
my ears tingle with excitement and smile.
The unfamiliar tune refreshes me,
brings rainbow's promises to my future.
At last, destiny is no longer bleak.
Though dark skies still loom, they now appear gray,
allowing the sun's brightness to peek through,
and its warmth to spray across my new soul.
I love words. They have great power within.
Life. Death. Grief. Hope. Destruction. Awesome love.
All things offered or taken with the speech.
Once orated, retreival is extinct.
Bruises from fists heal as time passes by.
Scars upon a soul from vocalized words,
they, they may never mend though lie dormant.
Adhessions grow on original wounds.
Exorcizing the demons that linger,
impossible, no, but often fatal.
The salve of gentleness, once applied there,
may form a seal around the open crust.
Yet, the infection has done its damage.
So, as you speak the language you have learned,
think carefully before you teach others.
Beauty can be found within your sweet voice.
Will you find it today to share with me?
Or will you be like them with killing lies?
I pray that we will, together, speak love
and cause the language of hate to decease.
copyright Viyanna R Langager
July 28, 2006
Author notes
just some thoughts i had.
Written August 10th, 2006
in considering if i wanted to be considered for judgship in this contest, i had to first clear up a personal matter. that being done, i am free to commit to a task such as this contest would require. thank you for considering me for this. i think it would be a great opportunity for me to even improve upon my own writing ability as i would be submersed in poetry. thank you again. viyanna rosemarie
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Oh, my gosh! This is simply breathtaking!
You are so very talented!I am going to put you on my fav list!God bless you!Yes, time heals, but only with God's help and by looking into those painful things that hurt you, and by releasing them to Jesus, and giving your past abusers to Jesus.Forgiveness doesn't mean letting them hurt you again;it just means that you let go of the poison and let God take care of your pain and let Him hold you!His love will heal you!I am going through that now.Inner healing takes time and getting close to God.Only He can heal you.It does help if you can have good friends.God Bless you abundantly!
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Your words create images and thoughts to ponder and share. I enjoy reading your work Good luck and God bless. Rose
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Flawless
The words flow so beautifully. This is talent, you are talent. I thank you very much for your comment on my poem, and wish you luck as well. Although with talent like this, luck is a mear assescory to you. The feeling is deep like being stabbed, like a tattoo the ink from the words, (words sweet as chocolate) seeps into your skin. A really marvolous creation, a battle with in ones emotions through out the peice. You deserve a trophy.
(And i'm not just saying that because this is a comment, i really do like your poem)
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Very well written!!!! And very well said!!!!
~DAWN~
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Very sorrow filled words but with strength to push through what will not be tolerated. The sadness was real and it was felt. very well done. ~ Mykeeee
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I love this poem it's powerful and brings the reader's attenchen.
Amber -
Very powerful and intense piece. Your words bring much emotion to the page. Thought provoking and quite profound work! Thanks for your entry!
~Lori -
Exorcizing the demons that linger,
impossible, no, but often fatal.
The salve of gentleness, once applied there,
may form a seal around the open crust
Great words and feelings expressed here... being that im a teenager i still have these feelings very strongly... do i wrestle with the demon inside or do i just let it be and hope when the time comes beat it... great write and good luck in the polls
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Your first stanza is very light and enticing to the reader, never knowing that it's going to turn into the subject that it did. This is a great write for all those who are recovering from dreadful and dark experiences in their lives to read. I can relate to so much of it, maybe not on the same topic but in the words you use to show where you were and how recovery feels. I think these lines sum this up very nicely:
At last, destiny is no longer bleak.
Though dark skies still loom, they now appear gray,
allowing the sun's brightness to peek through,
and its warmth to spray across my new soul.
I found the length of this a little much for me but that's my personal preferrence only, and the topic made me read to the end. I think you have a talent which could benifit other people. -
Upon reading this again I can state that an understanding of your past is very beneficial to the reader here. Ordinarily I would suggest author's notes, but, based on our past conversations I am completely understanding as why none exist.
The bad part about this work is also its triumph. You draw a sketch of life spent fighting against bad ideas and winning, not in spite of them, almost, but because of them. (Without them what would you have had to triumph over?) You delve a bit off topic from bad ideas to bad actions in the nineth stanza (line 34) but it is not entirely out of place given the circumstances.
If I have any recommendation about this piece it would be to shorten it some by combining a few of the stanzas. Sometimes words expressed succinctly have a greater impact on the reader. That would probably be very effective here as this piece is already impacting, and it might make up for a lack of author's notes by erasing some of the muck and mire the reader has to wade through to get to the underlying brillance.
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Very Good
Words, echoing in the wind, fall on me.
Tenderly caressing my saddened soul,
they hold my heart with sweet emotion's care
and wash pain away with healing grace.
I like the intro it draws the reader into the write. Very nicely done.
Will you find it today to share with me?
Or will you be like them with killing lies?
I pray that we will, together, speak love
and cause the language of hate to decease.
I liked the ending and agree with you. I am sorry the pain you felt. You wrote about it very well. -
Words, echoing in the wind, fall on me.
Tenderly caressing my saddened soul,
they hold my heart with sweet emotion's care
and wash pain away with healing grace.
loved the start..amazing poem well done xxx
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I really didn't find this to be overly long (I am referencing the old title that you used to have on here). I feel as though it flowed along competently. This was a worthwhile writing that expresses core ideas I think everyone can identify with. In that, it makes an excellent entry into this contest as those are all important traits to be found in judges (comptenecy, communication, rational, expression). Good choice. So:
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i didn't think it was too long but have noticed many think anything over 15 lines is too long. it depends on the subject and if it grows redundant for me. thank you so much for accepting me into the contest as a judge. dinner calls so i will finish up the rest of what i need to do later tonight. viyanna
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i really liked this peice. it had a beautiful flow to it and the feeling was constant throughout. thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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Just some thoughts you had... well you certainlly had a lot of them. What a write you have created with these words. Seemed like you were on a roll and really didn't want to quit. Very well done.
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A fine line walked between these two emotions and to even have lost love we would lie if we said we didn't have both of these in our hearts. In society, it is perhaps easier to hate than to find out more about why we do it and replace it with love. Patience and understanding can lead to the higher law of love but many fear it makes them weak yet it will actually make you stronger
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'Just some thoughts I have' Viyanna, your mind is a treasure trove filled with inspirations not only to self but to so many others facing new beginnings. Language(attitude) is a first step, it's a shame some fall in a mind set having been put there by another, feeding depression, but once changing the language, the attitude of self 'hey I'm so much more, I'm not listening to you anymore!' healing begins and a whole new outlook on life begins.
A wonderful pen with an extrodinary message you have given voice through, much applause!
Sending you love and
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Many blessings!
Sandi
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thank you for reading and commenting. you made me smile with the comment. viyanna
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Wow!!!!!!!! What a great piece!!!!! I am left speechless at this one! I really don't know what to say! This is amazing! Keep that pen flowing.
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thank you very much. things are getting better, finally. hope you are doing well. viyanna
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AWESOME JOB!!!!! ENJOYED IT!!!!!
Viyanna:
You know, you have been through hell and high waters, however, you have demostrated that you are indeed a strong person with a great heart and awesome feelings towards others.....
Sometimes we go through this things and all for a reason, only "HE" knows why..... You know that "HE" would not send you anything you could not endure.....
As Kevin said: "I feel that good does indeed win out in the end."
This piece shows your purity in words, and is very well written.....
Be blessed with love and light always.....
Your friend always,
AngelicMistress
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thanks kevin. i am only on for a few. how are you?
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A MOST BEAUTIFUL WRITE
Such beautiful thoughts my dear friend
I feel that good does indeed win out in the end.
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thank you so much. coming from a teacher of mine that means more than i can say. thank you again. i don't have a computer at home so i am so far behind it is pathetic. sorry for being so slow. viyanna rosemarie
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All that threatened to destroy my being,
now is given a voice as silence goes.
The torment that created many tears
is being drowned by the freedom of speech.
Shuddering, I faintly hear evilness.
It lies in the back of my mind, haunting.
Demeaning names struggle for a fresh breath.
Promises of death eagerly await.
wow. that is all that i can really say is just wow. excellent work. keep up the great work. kahy
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