Trapped inside my loneliness
I slowly waste away
My one and only left me
My heart dies day by day
Without my love I’m empty
My heart no one could mend
The soul that I once harbored
Has surely met its end
Months go by, I linger
Lost in memory
My life...
My life is......
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Written August 10th, 2006
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Nice write. I like the lingering feeling it leaves you with at the end. But love is a hard thing to come by. I hope you find it someday. Maybe not in this person you have lost, but i'll have you know that it takes lossing love to know what love really is. To experience it makes you ready for the next one that comes along. Keep your heart open. It is better this way. I know trust me. I have been there. It hurts now, but you will live. You are a gifted person. Your one will come. Great flow in this poem. Its heartfelt and very personal. I am here you know if you need an ear. I maybe a bitch, but I've been around.
Great poem. Its short but to the point and it hits home with me. -
John,
hi Im Tara.Sorry bout you loosin' your true love I hope you will find that 1 soon enuff and If you ever wanna chat write me.Good poem!!!!!!!!! -
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your life is dots
ha you left this poem hanging!
It got a good start, but doesn't seem to have much of a body, and no end!! but GREAT job
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This is a pretty good and reality-like piece. I know how it feels to linger as the months go by because I've done it once. And you know, I was able to escape it because I ignored it and focused on the friends of my life and the people who did love and respect me. This is a good poem for it has made me connect, it's clear in idea, and the emotion is felt as you read it. Thank you for writing!
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hey, i really liked this poem very much. i liked your rhyme scheme. thank you so much for sharing this poem. keep up the awsome work. fare thee well, tim aka childofthenight
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trapped in aour own made prison waiting to release ourselves, this is a emotionial driven poem that i can read over and over, i have felt like this many times. keep it flowing and love is never lost, true love hasn'tbeen found yet.
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Hi big bro!long time no talk!I just wanted to let u no i like this very much!its sad....but u did an anwesome job putting in emations
i applauded...i love how u left the reader hanging at the end it makes them wonder!gr8 write awesome job! lots a luv 
~ur lil sis Naty
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A very good description of the pain of heartache.. your words flow together in rhythm and with feeling behind each line. I like the way you ended this. Nicely done, Thank you for sharing.
~Kristy -
hey .. I really like this poem .. it makes me see that when you're 'one and only' leaves you .. you're not the only one that feels like this. I think when you really love someone, you'll feel this way .. I know what it is
Good job ont his poem !
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As I have read many of your pieces thus far I think it is more than fair for me to be the one to say this is your best work yet. It is emotional, hearty, sadening and most of all disturbing but it feels so damn real and right to the point which in effect makes it perfection. Kudos and congrats on the brilliant write.
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The rhyme is stellar. The content sad. I do hope that your heart mends and the love that will lost will be reclaimed or a new love will saunter their way into your lonely life. This poem is torching, and leaves the reader with a sense of loss. Absolutely heart-wrenching. I am sure familiar to many who will venture here to read. Excellent poetry here Poet. Thanks for sharing with us. Here's wishing for you a renewed spirit and much love.
Renee
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Trapped inside my loneliness
I slowly waste away
My one and only left me
My heart dies day by day
i really love this beginning part of the poem, it is a brilliant way to set the mood of the rest of the poem
great work
laurax -
This is a very sad and obviously deeply troubling perspective, though one I know a lot of people can relate to. I agree with Sarah Louise to say "die" should be "dies" but other than that cannot see any changes I would make. Short and powerful, thank you for sharing this work.
jamie -
A beautiful expression of loneliness and wanting. Flowing beautifully and effortlessly. Overall a brilliant peice. Bravo.
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My heart die(s) day by day
This is a heartfelt message and sad!! I think, in such a short poem, you have expressed yourself really well!
Sarah
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I know how you feel because I feel like that almost all the time. I have a poem called Loneliness. Please check it out and read it. I think you find them similiar.
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This is a good write! A few more verses and you have a really good song. There is good flow and rhythm. Your rhyme sounds unforced and easy. I remember one love lost, six months down the track, still in the depths of lost love. Eventually, the feelings passed, thank goodness!
Best Wishes -Emmjay
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ok this broke my heart. well penned full of alot of emotion. Had tears flowing from me. powerful work. I appreciate the way you csaught me up in this piece. I felt every bit of you. well done
vsutton -
A very deep write that touches the heart and goes straight to tug at it's heartstrings- -'Trapped inside my loneliness
I slowly waste away My one and only left me My heart die day by day'-one can feel the measures of lonliness here-and the heart slowly withering away is so apparent here-'Without my love I’m empty'-one can feel your misery here-' My heart no one could mend'-how ireplaceable your love has been -onlys adds to your lonliness-' The soul that I once harbored Has surely met its end'-this part is so sad-so very sad
-it is heart wrecking-not to be able to heal -the way you have just trailed offthis line is so effective to portray how you slowly dwindle away-'My life...My life is......'-A wonderful write-I have enjoyed every bit of it
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such a sad and lonely poem full of lots of emotion....really nice work and flow. keep up the great work! I look forward to reading and seeeing more of your work. Lots of openness and vulnerability in your work! thanks for sharing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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wow. this made me cry....everything u just wrote in this poem is what i am feeling right now!!!! ur amazing at what u do. i love this poem. i wish i new more of its background but i guess this will have to do..thank you for letting me read this.Once again i have to say..i read it again and i just LOVE it..i am still amazed at ur work. it was very poiwerful. truly very well written and I will read more.this is a vary good poem i love the meaning behind it and the love that i can tell u added to it. its vary deep and its true.
Keep up the good work and NEVER GIVE UP
Love always
~~~*DIAMONDTHEUNWANTED*~~~
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