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Do I Dare?

 

 



For so long,
I have wanted you here.
Flesh and blood;
breathing the same air.


Far too many times,
I have cried myself to sleep
in the absence of your kiss.


The desire to fall deep
within the depths of your hypnotic eyes
consumes me constantly.

To experience
the loving dominance of your touch
has become the dream that engulfs me each night. 


A silent longing
to awaken swaddled within
your embrace bellows from my heart.


To be taken,
made yours completely is a fantasy
branded in my mind, body and soul.


Now you are here
I tremble,
I hesitate....
         Do I dare?



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  • poetryality silver member
    June 14, 2007

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    Awww... this poem hit me hard, and pulled at my heart strings with a gentle tug. I have felt these feelings. They are more resent that you can even imagine. A very passionate poem filled with love, anxiousness, desire, yearning, and all the kind of stuff that makes us swoon. Melancholy but very beautiful!


    Much Love ♥

    Mom


  • HeavenonEarth
    June 13, 2007

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    Damn Bel,
    Girl you definitely know how to pen the feelings of the heart my dear friend. I wish you nothing but the best in the contest dear friend
    but, you know you are the winner in your heart ♥
    Love ya!
    ~Joy


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 13, 2007

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    You hit the mark, Bel
    You hit the mark solid; dead on
    I love this
    Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest..awesome


  • forever and ever
    January 29, 2007
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    This is an amazing write! I really liked it! i could really connect! You have a great way with words! I loved all of the visuals that you used, and everything about it really! INCLUDING the picture! Great write! Keep it up!


  • Blooming Poet
    January 3, 2007

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    That is amazing. That is exactly what I'm looking for . I can fweel all of the pain, emotions, and everything eelse you may be feeling


  • child of grace
    December 17, 2006
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    wonderful. was passionate, emotional and I loved the question at the end...brilliant.
    s


  • WickdlyUndrstanding
    December 11, 2006

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    This is very good. It is true, for in all aspects of life today people 'will do' this or 'are going to' do that'- but they don't.. Great write!
    ~WU
    PS- The last line is great


  • Alleksa Jan
    December 2, 2006

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    Chef-d'oeuvre

    Now if this poem isn't powerful - I don't know what is!
    Every stanza has so much within, every stanza builds up the crescendo of untold emotion, of unspoken love.
    Masterfully written and possesses of so much beauty - my words fail me.
    Now I will allow myself to chose my favourite stanza- oh yes it is the last one - a nuclear explosion and perfect ending -
    "Now you are here
    I tremble,
    I hesitate....
    Do I dare?"

    I daresay you are very talented and for this reason need not my rant on how much I liked the poem.

    Thank you for sharing this gem of a poem,

    Regards,
    Clapping Jan


  • hand-in-hand
    December 1, 2006

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    oh my oh my, i had somehow skipped by this poem, how dare i. It is so perfect . I am almost done judging and will strongly consider this. Good luck


  • -ButterflyCuts-
    August 15, 2006
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    Very sensual - without being very sexual it has that erotic feel to it. Very tense, and.. tingly Nice..

  • OurxBeginning
    August 11, 2006
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    Aww this is very sweet and I really enjoyed reading it. The picture is really beautiful, just as the words are. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • dustookie2
    August 11, 2006
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    raw emotions

    such raw emotions i feel from your lines they flow smoothly from the page to my lips stopping at my heart and tugging out old emotions which i thought were buried deep. Good luck in the contest brilliantly penned


  • Tatianna Valcor
    August 11, 2006
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    Auntie this was beautiful and I have to ask the same question as Andy. What the heck is going on with you and Uncle? I hope things are ok! Your poetry is sooo good Auntie and I hope you win!


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    August 10, 2006
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    Awww Sis this is absolutely beautiful. You have penned an outstanding piece of loving poetry. Best of luck in the contest.


    little bro


  • Wolfdog silver member
    August 10, 2006
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    Excellant/romantic

    Very good.


  • Sunkissedrose
    August 10, 2006
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    I say dare darling dare. If you feel this strongly, and the person feels the same..don't hesitate....great piece full of strong emotions, and just raw intensity. Keep it up
    ~Carrie


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 10, 2006
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    What beautiful words inscribed in love to the one you care so deeply for, thanks for sharing this, and I bet I know who shall enjoy this most!

    Pen on sweet soul!
    -Timothy

  • coldest day ever
    August 10, 2006
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    i can understand what you're getting at in this poem. longing for someone and then actually getting that can be more overwhelming then you thought it could be. it's like having a line and when the line you've tried to erase for many days, and when the line is finally erased you think about drawing it back. good poem.

  • Son of Jim
    August 10, 2006
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    The desire, the build, the feelings. Could have done without stanza three, but that's o.k.. Your use of some personification had done this poem well.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    August 10, 2006
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    Yes! yes! do dare!. It's a wonderful piece loaded with all sorts of different emotions. I love it. Thanks so much for sharing.


  • SecretSafe
    August 10, 2006
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    wow.. that was really good.. thank you so mcuh for sharing nice!!!

  • Wolfdog silver member
    August 10, 2006
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    Excellant/romantic

    Wow, I love it just as it is.


  • BabyDut
    August 10, 2006
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    I won't dare, not to think of him here, not for one more day, it hurts to much of the chances that he could ruin my life, again for the 5th 6th 7th time I don't know anymore, I thought you have a good idea here, I picture it longer or maybe you have a part 2 you would be working on, to me seems a bit short then what I could be.

  • two friends
    August 10, 2006
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    I love this piece!!! it is so personal, and the emotion just pours out of it! this one is sooo good, you did really well with this, it flowed sooooo so well! Loved it *two friends* ~A~


  • WulfDiamondLou33
    August 10, 2006
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    This is soo good!!! i love it. it makes u wonder if the things that u want to do to a person if u willreally do it when they are there.....so might..i have never.

    Keep up the good work.

    Love DIAMOND THE UNWANTED


  • Always Deena
    August 10, 2006
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    YES!Damn straight do it...then whisper all the details to me I need a good romance novel.
    Great to read you and hope all your wishes come true.
    As Always,
    Deena


  • Andy Stephenson
    August 10, 2006
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    What is going on between you and Wolf? Your author's note piqued my curiosity. A very nice poem and I would say if you dream such things about the person, you should dare.

  • a u r a
    August 10, 2006
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    :f

    wow! this is beautiful -you have used the most effective words to convey something that one can so easily relate to -emotions that are so real so felt- so deep-I marvel the simplicity of the choice of words that you have used -I really liked the poem in totality- your last line is so amazingly tender,'Do I dare?'


  • robert bolin
    August 10, 2006
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    Very versital and lyrical, Brilliantly penned, Loved the images that played in my mind over and over again, The wait the anticipation and the pleasure of going the distance all the way
    Damn one hot write, Thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your write and thank you for sharring your work with us time and time again..

  • luvdrkchocolate
    August 10, 2006
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    Oh my! That is some poem that you have going on in here! And boy is that picture ever creepy! I don't think that it's supposed to be, but it sure gave me the willies when I came in! I like your poem though! It is very intense and full of words that speak of such longing and hope! So many of us have had someone that we wish for so much. I can only imagine how daunting it must be to have him actually come to you in the end. And your ending surprised me. It was kind of exciting. So I think that you did a good job of expressing yourself here. Good luck in the contest you entered and thanks for featuring this so that we all had a chance to share your words and feelings with you!


  • bedazzled
    August 10, 2006
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    Fantastic imagery and strong emotion, very well written


  • Mystikrypton
    August 10, 2006
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    "Do I dare?"...that is the question. This was well-written, and I like your choice and background and font, it really highlighted your beautiful words. Well done on this poem.


  • eyesofanangel524
    August 10, 2006
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    Wonderful

    This is a wonderful read. So true...wanting then getting and then fear creeps in. Sometimes we just have to leap with the faith and conviction that brought us to that point. Very well done and a wonderful read. Thank you for sharing.


  • Sonja
    August 10, 2006
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    As always your words are strong but gentle at the same time, full of deep feelings and nice pictures. Nice dedication to somebody who is important to you. Summer love could be sweet and bitter at the same time, same as the hot cup of tea. Sip it slow and enjoy.
    ~Sonja~


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    August 10, 2006
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    Awwwwwwwwwwsooooommmmmmeeee piece, my poetic sister girl! Yayyyyyyy!!!! This is stunning! All the best to you!


  • Untouchable Blue
    August 10, 2006
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    That is a stunning picture. I think you matched the words to the picture very well.

    "Now you are here
    I tremble,
    I hesitate....
    Do I dare?"

    That was such a good way to close the poem! Those four lines just jumped out at me, and suddenly, it was as if I could feel it too.


  • luckynsincere
    August 10, 2006
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    p.s.

    the pic is GREAT!!!


  • luckynsincere
    August 10, 2006
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    You are such a delight to read. Each and every time... I just seep into the realms of your enchanting words. Such love and dedication is captured here... you are incredible!! Great job sweety.
    (first line in second stanza should be "too")
    I see you entered this contest too... yahhhh... good luck babe!

    -leaves a yummy shot of jose and dashes back out-
    Mel

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