You start at slender feet;
tickling – caressing your way up,
slipping over calves…
I shiver with anticipation,
as you pause at quivering knees.
I grab for you and pull you up…
Greedy for more!
I am rapt in my yearning to savor;
the rasping feel of you devouring me.
You linger at milky thighs.
Spiraling awareness
has me convulsing;
Contorting upon the bed.
My need for you is fervent!
My desire for you insatiable!
Struggling,
I Lift receptive hips;
finally I am surrounded by you.
I moan,
as you wrap yourself around me.
Encasing me tightly.
Captured
by the wonder of your warm snug sheath;
I whimper and pull you close.
I gasp!
As I surrender to the sensations;
Spilling thru my stomach.
I can’t breathe!
As I lay there worn,
And spent upon the bed.
Waiting for feelings
of comfort and security
to wash over me.
God, I love my jeans!
Patricia Gibson-Little
April 9, 2003
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Was I too obvious?
Written April 10th, 2003
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This is totally a fun poem! The ending was a great surprise..I was thinking maybe a blanket at the beginning. Excellent use of erotic hinting.
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um. jeans?
the whole time, i was sitting here thinking: geeze. she loves her orgasms? her dildo? tickler? erm. What? really had me going and it was climactic. so. nice devices and fine execution. i. um. "enjoyed" this. -
The build up was gripping and excellent. Holds the reader's attention. Nice structure, creative concept. Good work.
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MUUUUUUUUUUUAHAHAHAHHA now THAT was fun
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Nice work. I was expecting something like jeans (or other article of clothing), but I liked the way you toy with the reader. A good poem you have here.
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LOL Very well done. I thought at first that it would be pantyhose but alas I was wrong. Way to go . You were very deft at bringing the thoughts of the reader along with the ruse.
You linger at milky thighs.
Spiraling awareness
has me convulsing;
Contorting upon the bed.
That's my favorite part, very clever deception, until you get to the end of the poem then it is sooooooooooo true. Bravo, good luck in the challenge
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Very cleverly done, good use of the readers obvious thoughts.
A good style and the accessibility to every reader give this an instant impact which is added to by the effective delivery of voice. -
LMAOO!!!! I wasn't thinking JEANS LOL you sure fooled me
wonderfully done. 'breath,' needs to be 'breathe.'
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great
Hehe you did very well here! I didnt know it was your jeans! lol Glad you like yours so much... Myself, I wear em and toss em away after a couple of months! Mwahahahahaha And get myself a new fresh pair! -
amusing
Aha, it was your jeans!
I thought it was something else,
so this wasn't too obvious for me.
The idea was good & clever.
Like all poems, it could do with a bit of tinkering,
a little re-write here, & there...
a bit more playfulness with the language, perhaps?
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