My breast pounds in woe
and my molars butcher the cherry flesh
wrapping the stone.
I say Good Sir, this is a bitter day for fruit.
Under my eyelid quakes a bead,
heeding protection from my rosy cheek --
I shall not let it roll,
and you shan’t be contented, Kind Sir.
When maggots emerge as blue bottles
and ewes birth lambs, again.
Then -- I will be glad and still, Sir
delighting alone in sweet cherries.
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This is supposed to be about heartbreak....although the majority of comments say it is hard to understand. Please see my reply if you too have trouble understanding.
Written August 9th, 2006
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Thanks for the comment. I'm pretty much sure I said everything I wanted to say in there. Here's what it was supposed to mean.
It's supposed to be about the end of a relationship.
"My breast pounds in woe
and my molars butcher the cherry flesh
wrapping the stone.
I say Good Sir, this is a bitter day for fruit."
This is about being upset about being dumped to be honest. The cherry is the heart...biting into it is about the subject feeling it's her fault for falling in love and the stone is the centre of all emotions. It's a bitter day for fruit because her heart is broken.
"Under my eyelid quakes a bead,
heeding protection from my rosy cheek --
I shall not let it roll,
and you shan’t be contented, Kind Sir."
Obviously about feeling tears in the eyes. But to keep her pride she doesn't want to cry and show shes upset, thinking if she does, he will get what he wanted.
"Maggots emerge as blue bottles
and ewes birth lambs, again.
Then -- I will be glad and still, Sir
delighting alone in sweet cherries."
Is about changes and new beginnings, thinking to the future alone. The subject is trying to convince herself in time she will be happy and can have her heart to herself again (cherry).
Hope that helped, thanks for the comment.
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I would also like to mention that i haven't a clue what you are talking about.. it may seem redundant.. but i like to speak the same voice
lol... though the imagry of this poem is facinating... it makes it seem as there is alot more to a story that isn't being told.. there is a relation.. the poem can be taken in so many ways just because of how vast ideas can be taken.. but it seems unfinished.. as if the idea that is trying to be said isn't... or maybe it is just a very vivid depiction and this is really all you have.. but the description you have portrayed is great.. very well done.. and thought provoking.. so i'm curious to if this actually has more meaning.. or just a nice colaboration of description.. so very well done.. and keep writing (this comment gets me to 3000 points 
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Edited on Aug 12, 1:42 p.m. because ''. -
i think is great i liked the fruit thing in the very beginning, quite ingenious, i must say i admire your grammatic as i have a really hard time with it, also even though I enjoyed reading I had a really hard time trying to figure out what the hell you were talking about, and to be honest, i think i still dont get so if you would please explain me I would be very happy to finally understand
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I'm going to be honest and tell you a haven't a clue to what you are talking about. I got your metaphors and that was about it. I did sense a deep emotion in the tone of this. You may want to go over punctuation again. Especially, the uses of semicolons. Heavy imagery involved in this. I'll check back to see what develops.
love you
Martha
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skillful written in old language
you write lovely
i love the language you speak in your writings. check out a few of mine sometime.
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