I wait…
For an idea;
But nothing comes to me.
I sit and stare at blank paper’
Waiting!
Hours…
Pass slowly by.
Empty mind grows weary;
Searching for thoughts that will not come.
Nada!
Still here…
Yet days have come;
And days have slipped away.
Days turn into weeks – weeks to years.
Alone!
Lonely…
I miss my life.
But vacant paper sings;
Of great poems yet unwritten!
I’m caught!
Author notes
This is also my first cinquain. It's hard for me to write in such a structured form. But here it is.
Written April 9th, 2003
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oh wow, you did an excellent job here, not an easy task, but you've pulled it off with flying colors. i love this!!!!
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Excellent!
I know I am very blessed because the only time I have ever experienced writer's block was when I chose to intoxicate my self with a daily routine of drugs, and alcohol in a past life.
I have never tried my hand at a "cinquain", but you have inspired me to try one with this heartfelt write. You explained the phenomenom of writer's block in great detail. My block lasted for 3 drunken years.
Thanks for reminding me never to go to that world again.
This was excellent!
Much Love,
Renee
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it really awesome..especialy the end...
wonderful write..
"Lonely…
I miss my life.
But vacant paper sings;
Of great poems yet unwritten!
I’m caught! "
thats really amazing.
take care.
Wael
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Im sorry, I cant think of anything intelligent to say 
I really liked this but Im fighting a migraine and promise to leave a more interesting comment next one
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Ha ha ha ha ha, I can see the insperation here as well. Good luck with the challenge.
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hehe very good!! i know exactly where you are coming from. i hate writers block. I HATE IT I HATE IT I HATE IT. whew that felt good to get that out. now i can move on!! blank paper always seems likes its mocking me for some reason. i often wonder if others feel the same. my cure for blank paper is drawing a big smiley face on it. lol but i'm a pretty weird little child.
great job teammate and good luck!!!!
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I came up with two syllables from two sites.
Merriam-Webster
Main Entry: hour
Pronunciation: 'au(-&)r
http://www.m-w.com/cgi-bin/dictionary
http://rhyme.poetry.com/r/rhyme.cgi?Word=sours&typeofrhyme=perfect&org1=syl&org2=l&cbr=pc
You're right another one of those words... I usually use the second one to check my count, but it's less accurate. -
Cleverly thought out poem, as the others have said you turned a negative into a positive.
For a first attempt at a cinquain you have done well, the only technical aspect which I could see as a possible fault would be the first line of the second verse, (although this could be one of those words which have different syllable counts depending on your accent,) by my definition, "Hours," [owrz] is a single syllable, unless it is "hour's" I would be interested in any sugestions on this one. -
Writing about not being able to write. I like it. A good poem here.
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Writing about not being able to write. I like it. A good poem here.
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major points for using 'nada'. it certainly evoked a grin from THIS judicious chica! everything was cohesive, and that's cool. i do suggest that perhaps sometime you experiment a bit with the capitalization. it could carry a more conversational/familiar tone if it weren't so 'formal'.
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very well done for your first cinquain. I like the ending best, 'vacant paper sings,' always taunting yup. ~enjoyed...Good job Poetic Knight!
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I can understand the inspiration for this poem lol. This is a tough challenge, but you did well. The first stanza, 2nd line has too many syllables if I counted correctly. Other than that the structure, voice and expression is good.
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