I can be so pretty
so pretty
when I tell you these lies
and make youthink I'm a girl
a girl I'm really not
so pretty when I make you think
make you see this mask
this mask that says I'm
everything
everything you ever dreamed of
dream on, love
dream this dream where I am
so very pretty
because the more I tell these lies
the more I act this part
the more you make me believe
myself
believe I'm so pretty
I can be so pretty
then I believe all my own pretty lies
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Written August 8th, 2006
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wow, that sounds really cool. I didn't think about it like that. Bravo.
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this isn't really about telling actual lies... it's more about having someone dote on me and be enamored with me and for me to try and be the best person I can be. However I always have a little seed of self doubt within myself and therefore a little self loathing. It's about acting like the girl i want to be and the guy I love making me feel like that girl to the point where I believe I am that girl and I don't have to try to be this cool, beautiful girl because I really am her!
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No I am a girl lol...
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i like this. i liked how the end of each line flowed into the next. this is so easy to relate to, because we all tell people lies to get sympathy, or attention or whatever. also i liked it because it's something that happens to pretty much everyone, and saying that you make yourself believe them is really sad. anyways, this is very well written. good job. keep it up.
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Unusual way of writing, using part of the previous line in the next one, Line four
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i really loved the pace of this poem
i also loved the fact that i had to
read it again because i loved it so much.
thank u -
very good a real issue that is so beautifully portrayed
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okay at first I thought you were a girl...but you werent a girl...yeah. lol. anyways this piece is really...dunno...kinda hitting to the core for a lot of us girls these days. a lot of us put on fake facades to make guys like us...but that shouldnt be the case. Im sure that YOU are a beautiful person and noone should ever say otherwise sweetie. Drop the facade, and let the person who you really are shine through.
Sethresa -
Wow!
Great work! I can tell a lot of emotion went into this one. Keep it up!
-Tim -
I can relate to this. Yo do start to believe in your own lies after so long when you tell them. It can really become a war within yourself. This was an amazing write, thanks for putting it up.
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nice
wow, very intersting. It is true though. If you lie enough, you begin to believe your own lies, then you can never turn away from them. A very good write. I applaud. -
everything you ever dreamed of
dream on, love
dream this dream where I am
so very pretty
because the more I tell these lies
the more I act this part
the more you make me believe
myself
believe I'm so pretty
I can be so pretty
then I believe all my own pretty lies
like this!! sad but good!!
love
jamila
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