Here's to the selfish,
the greedy ones, the manipulative ones,
the ones who will always be a burden to their families,
the ones who will never make it on their own.
Here's to the stupid,
the uneducated ones, the lazy ones,
the ones who do not know what proper grammar is,
the ones who never make it to college, not bright enough to care.
Here's to the spineless,
the scared ones, the cowardly ones,
the ones who cannot stand up for themselves,
the ones who will always take the easy way out.
Here's to the sleazy ones,
Here's to the ones who make you want to scream,
Here's to the fat ones and the whoring sluts too,
Here's to the ones who just give you that blank stare.
Here's to you:
The Rotten Branch of the Family Tree.
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Written August 7th, 2006
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Have a couple revision suggestions:
1: "the ones who aren't" can be changed to "not"....simplifies your stanza and evens it up.
2:"Here's to the fat ones,
Here's to the slutty ones," could theoretically be in one line, kinda like this )although you can work with it) :
"Here's to the fat ones, and whoring sluts too"
Lastly, love how you started the stanzas. This shows of your tones of bitterness and anger well. The theme works for you in this.
Bummer.....I was very critical with this poem....sorry. Got maybe a little too analytical.
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haha that certain part of the family does make me really mad
im usually a nice person though.
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good work
damn...why don't you tell us how you really feel and stop being shy? lol a little rough, but more true than i've seen in awhile. remind me not to make you mad lol.
dark minstrel
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