World of Delusions
Living in your own world,
trapped within your warped mind.
Your shelled existence, a muted lie.
Envious of those around you,
you haven't even begun scratching
the surface looking for the truth.
What lies inside your head?
Seems to me like, severe insanity.
Your splintered thoughts
appear to be your go between
from rolling memories to faded hopes.
As I see it, you are unfit.
Not suited for the respect and love
that you so graciously thieved.
Day after day it's all the same,
we walk around you, tip-toeing
in a muffled silence,
awaiting your next outburst.
But to be honest,
I'd rather ride shotgun
on a suicide mission,
then live in your world of delusions
Author notes
the words in my word bank are
splintered
go between
rolling memories
envious
scratching
shotgun
severe insanity
faded hopes
thieved
shelled existance
Written August 7th, 2006
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thank you Teresa for your comment, I do appreciate it much.
loco lobo -
Thank you Summer for your comment. I appreciate it very much.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
thank you Bel for your kind and wonderful words, they mean alot to me.
Little Brother
~Ktulu~ -
Well Lil brother I must say I am highly impressed with your creativity is the use of your issued word bank. I am so pleased you found such inspiration within the words and you were so easily capable of expressing some wonderfully amazing images within this piece. Well Done!
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Ktulu, this was amazing! I loved this one stanza over all though,
I'd rather ride shotgun
on a suicide mission,
then live in your world of delusions
only you would go and take shotgun and use it like this! I loved it haha. Very good poem and I wish you tons of luck in this contest.
~Summer~ -
ooooo.... Ktulu this is wonderfully penned my friend. I thinkn you will do very well in this challenge
Wish you the best of luck!
Mel
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wow this is really great i love it so personal and just in your face great job and good luck in the contest, but i don't think you will need the luck with talent like this.
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Excellent write Ktulu!! This is very personal and it also gets your point out, nicely done. Awesome job with the word bank. My thoughts and prayers are with you and your family during this tough time. Keep your head up, it will get better. The Lord doesn't give you more than you can handle. Blessings
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Uh Oh Hummmmmmm..... it sounds like mommy dearest to me, nice poem I vented to you will have to read my last two. Good job with your word bank.
Elizabeth
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very very good. I really like this alot.
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Loved it!!!!
This is a wonderful piece here...I love how u put everything together. Awesome job. Wow...I just reread it again and it is amazing. U have some talent hun.
Kari -
WOW!!!!!
Sounds like a nightmare not living to me
Very good piece though
Roses to you
Teresa
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great
Very good write..Sounds like someone got your dander up. Keep writing , you have alot of talent and I'm proud of you and how much your talet has matured.. -
thank you very much for your comment, I appreciate it very much.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Sweet!!! I loved it..One of my favorite kinds of writes are word banks.. I may have to enter this one, or at least get the words and write something!! lol
Krystal
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Thank you very much for your comment. I appreciate it very much.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
thank you very much for your comment..it is kinda personal as well.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
I like this. Seems not only personal but gives a need to let someone know how you feel about something!Great write!!!
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thank you very much for your comment, I appreciate it.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Ooooo I like this, sounds very personal.
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Oh write on, my friend! Write ON!
This is a rockin' piece of poetry! All the best to you!
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