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river (haiku)

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River babbling
Of sorrows to the willows
Weeping on her face


Patricia Gibson-Williams

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Written April 9th, 2003

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  • AgelessPain
    April 10, 2003
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    wow..thats really beautiful...Love it..
    btw i was reading your profile.well I lately and for a long time been listening to depressing music as anathema,my dying bride;if you know them or even read some depressing things,cause it speaks about how I feel..anyway i wont babble more about myself and get you bored..
    Wonderful poem.
    Wael


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    April 9, 2003
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    Interesting question... It depends on where I look. Found it as both two and three. I could change it to

    river babbling songs
    of sorrow to the willows
    weeping on her face


  • Barbara gold member
    April 9, 2003
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    love that middle line...very emotional

    is babbling 2 syllables? ummm....nope...one of those "depends on how you pronounce it words"