You once said 'i love you'
You once said 'never' is a promise
That you would keep.
Did you just say that?
Did you mean it?
Tell me darling~
Was anything you said true?
You touched me deeply
Like no other~
You filled my heart
With so much love~
Never knew I had.
Did you mean too?
Were you just playing games?
Tell me darling~
Was anything you said true?
You said 'never' is a promise,
I said 'never say never'
Guess I was right.
'Hang on' you said~
I did, but did you
Let go?
Tell me darling
Did you mean any of it?
Were you just playing
With my heart?
Tell me darling~
You once said 'i love you'
Are you like a faucet?
On and off at a simple turn~
Darling~don't play with
My heart this way~
I love you~you know I do
So tell me darling~
What went wrong?
Author notes
For you, you know who you are.
a lost love
Written August 7th, 2006
The answer:
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- Love and Hurt by xofightinirishx3.
495 points, ended May 20, 2008, 26 entries
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i really enjoyed this! i felt your emotion
You said 'never' is a promise,
I said 'never say never'
Guess I was right.
i really liked these lines, they made me think. good luck and thanks for entering -
Wow! Heartbreaking!
I love the short lines and simple wording. This poem didn't need to be extremely long or have fancy words to say what needed to be said.
I love how you reuse the other person's words in this and your responses to them. This is full of emotion and heartache.
I love these lines:
You said 'never' is a promise,
I said 'never say never'
Guess I was right.
'Hang on' you said~
I did, but did you
Let go?
Tell me darling
Did you mean any of it?
Were you just playing
With my heart?
I'm sorry you went through this, but I'm glad you can get it out by writing.
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I know exactly how this feels, it breaks my heart to know someone else has gone through this, though I know they have. Beautifully expressive and sad... My ex promised me a lot of things too, like he'd never leave me but he didn't keep that promise, but what can you do huh? Beautifully done though.
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Heartfelt
hhmmm girl - you are pouring your heart and if it goes unheard, that person is not worth, I think
- telling you as a friend... as a poem it has captured emotions to the core... strong, heart broken, heartfelt... words flow like a gentle breeze to form a masterpiece... thanks for opening your heart, now just wait for the smiles to move in soon...and they will... take care Minoo
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I lovd it. The emotion was strong. You should have read all the rules though, but it really was great.
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It sucks when we do not know the answers. Sometimes we just grow away rom the ones we love. Sometimes youth disrtacts what are heart is truly feeling.. and we cannot go back for the shame of being of denied. Thank you for entering. You have a wonderful write here full of questions we all have about the ones we loved and lost.
~Krys~
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This is what I like to call a beautiful disaster, because the writing is magnificent, but the cause is disastrous. The poem is aboslutely amazing, and something all of us find ourselves asking. The "hang-on" part reminds me of something that might get me to write another poem, not sure... but I love this poem. Wow. Well done... and ek is lief vir jou altyd
hope you feel much better very soon
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i understand soo much i mean i went thru the same thing u knw he tells he luvs he will never let u go but then out or nowhere he doesnt want u anymore. its like y did u make fall for just so u can break my heart u knw. but yea i guess i understand u. u did great keep writing
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Very Good.
you express your feeligs very well very nice read you have done a wonderful job i love the ending take care very well done -
Oh...this is soo beautiful...
So full of simplicity and genuine feelings.
"Darling~don't play with
My heart this way~
I love you~you know I do
So tell me darling~
What went wrong?"
Love does go wrong sometimes doesn't it?
Something so right...takes a wrong turn and then we are faced with a broken heart.
Nothing ever stays the same...though we do wish for it to stay.
But life is in a constant state of alert
Changing with every gust of wind...
Be strong.
All my love.
~Hana~ -
Well I know It's not me. But I liked it great feelings. The flow was wonderful the energy and feelings in it give the words Life, As such I'd say I'm proud of this one though I'm sure you don't need that from me.
Later
Romeo -
love n peace
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I know how you feel, this is a great write. I hope you find out the answer to all your question.
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Oh, this is so sad!
No person should be thrown away like a used tissue, but that happens to people every day, doesn't it? I'm sorry he did this to you, and it is hard for old wounds to heal, but we're all here for you to support you. *more s * A wonderful poem, very deep. Your emotion flows through it very powerfully. Makes me want to hurt the one that did this to you. I shan't of course, but still.....
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Great write. Very touching and it holds a lot of emotion. Nice.
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Excellent
wow.. so many questions... and NEVER any answers lol... very nice write.. it is soo true too.. -
woah, DARK and DEEP. i think you need one of these . it's a wonderful poem mom, all in all. i love you and i hope you have a wonderful day, and know that i am ALWAYS here for you.
Love, Little One
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i relly like you'r poetry it rocks. peac out!
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I liked this. The lines of questions really lead the reader (specifically the person this is to) to continue reading, to try to answer the questions. This is a write to which many people can relate. Good write; strong emotion.
Thanks for sharing
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This is a great peice, I know how it feels to feel the way you are now. Thanks so much for sharing.
Ashley -
Excellent
Sis, this is truly deep and I felt every word of it in the core of my soul...
People don't always appreciate what they have untill its gone, so for the those of you who are out there, always think twice... You never know...
Hope all goes well, my thoughts are with you...
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